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Eternal Chaos

Relentless past faults
Surround her securely in sorrow
Peircing fear of the unpredictable future
Harshly caresses her broken thoughts
Dated lies resume theyre darkening wrath
Posing as happiness
She grabs hold tight
Unforgettable experiences have left her forever afraid
Afraid of relationships
Those that will become
The core of her eternal confusion
Withholding this chaos
Seem to her
Something that must be done
For if she is to rely on strength
To pull her through
She must hide her building hate
Pride seems to be a far-fetched quality
Within view though never in reach
Presenting herself as a partially stable being
Is a struggle she must forever survive
Too be open with these countless though significant emotions
Is considered a weakness of the worst kind
And to be considered weak
Is a fear that runs along side her
As she constantly flees her consuming unwanted fate.

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  • Rianna Bear
    March 28, 2007
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    Hmm...sounds like this speaker is running scared of her own feelings, that she feel may hurt her down the line. scorned?...or just scared of being vulnerable...that IS the question! Very good job at bringing forth this dark emotion!


    Rianna


  • josh-13
    March 25, 2007

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    A lot of emotion, and revealing of flaws, Interesting poem, You did an awesome job writing it, I do think that if you add more direction in it, it would turn out to be a masterpiece. All and all, it was heartfelt and emotional, I liked the 3rd person effect. Anyways I liked it, it's well worth an applaud.


    • Clinging-to-Life
      March 26, 2007
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      Thank you for your oppinion. I greatly appreciate the honesty. More contructive feedback like yours, and I am sure I could improve greatly. Thank you once again. I really do appreciate it.


  • poet2angels gold member
    March 24, 2007

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    lots of emotion in this poem and true sentiments of how hatred can consome one and how weaknessmakes us easy prey...
    Great job!

    Lynda


  • RoseGirl
    March 24, 2007
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    good job

    this poem was good.the feelings in this poem was awsome.I love that one part whare you said"Presenting herself as a pertially stable being Is a struggle she must forever survive Too be open with these countless though significant emotions"I love this poem

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