A century from now...
I will stand at the foot of your grave,
looking down at the remnants of your soul.
For we both know, that to paradise it shall not depart.
The shackles of the grave shall keep you bound to this earth...
As karma finally wraps the noose about your neck,
to hang you from the tree that bears the fruits of your labor.
Malice. Lies. Deceit...the stones you used to build my wall of insecurity.
Within that broken template of time...
I shall stand in the soft caress of the wind,
and listen as your soul screams in agony and your bones turn to ash.
What shall I wear I wonder, perhaps your favorite of garments...
Your cloak of conviction...
Your hat of hypocrisy...
And maybe even your favorite belt of betrayal.
Did these not put you in your comfort zone?
I hope you enjoy your stay in the cold hard earth...
Tis where you were born,
and where your soul shall die.
For there is no room in paradise for a soul as black and tainted as yours.
R.I.P
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475 points, ended March 30, 2007, 18 entries
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Comments
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I need to get one thing straight - A century from now?
I'm not sure how you can stand at someone's grave a century later as you would be dead yourself.
If you were, however talking maybe about the soul dying .. then it might have made a bit more sense but does a soul die?
Otherwise .. very interesting
Good Luck in the contest and thank you for entering
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i would like to thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Magnificent metaphor, breathtaking in it's beautiful wrath.
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thank you mich. Glad you liked it
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Powerful and emotionally arresting. This is very vengeful and stings in the soul. Very vivid, blunt and talented. Well done!
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oh a deep write, I just loved -- As karma finally wraps the noose about your neck. I am a big believer of Karma, so like how you incorporated it.
I dont have words for how good this stanza is, its just brilliant ---- What shall I wear I wonder, perhaps your favorite of garments...
Your cloak of conviction...
Your hat of hypocrisy...
And maybe even your favorite belt of betrayal.
Did these not put you in your comfort zone?
Wowee, an enticing write with strong conviction
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eek! you read another!thank you thank you thank you...just got up and i'm back on...(addiction in its highest form) I'm soooooooo glad you loved the poem. Its actually one of my favs. This was the one my Muse returned with. So its gat sentimental values lol. much thanks and much love!
XXXOOOXXXX
K.V
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Powerful write....Liked your style...
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wow thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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great pls write more
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thank you again! lol [ish feeling shpecial]
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good write.
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Your cloak of conviction...
Your hat of hypocrisy...
And maybe even your favorite belt of betrayal.
To start off i love these lines...They are few of many strong and powerful lines in this.
The last stanza is wonderful. This is just great. I liked this so much. It brightened up my day!! ^_^ Thanks for entering, good luck
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yaya! thank you! i'm glad you liked it and even more happy that it brightened your day...lol wierd though...that's not a very happy poem lol. anyhoot what you like is what you like. thanks again.!
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Great write and thanks for the entry.
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Your emotions come through very well on this. I felt an anger stirring inside of me for someone I didnt know. Nice but you have of twice simple typo just thought I'd bring it to your attention the line: And maybe even your favorite belt of of betrayal. Other than that good job
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Oh thank you ssoooo much and I'll be correcting that asap. thanks again and I appreciate it this much.
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whoa!
Now this is dark and cold....and beautifully written...
I love this and admire your ability to pen such emotion and intensity....
Outstanding!
Lynda
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OmG...if only you knew how long i've been waiting to see a positive critique. phew you made my day. thank you. I thought i lost my muse but i think she found her way back to me. thank you again. yay! lol
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