Bubblegum Bistro
Very Strawberry
Coral Cafe
Pink's Paradise
Author notes
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Clicking my fingers quite a bit.
Hello is worth it even though I have a deadline,
Extremely nice rhythm in, "Bubblegum Bistro," although I don't particularly believe that gum symbolizes healthy food other than that it may make saliva to clean teeth. Any form of 'Bubble' is fine if you wish to edit. "Bistro" is a word I've never heard before and I love what you've shown me today!
I think I catch how you were trying to have flow in each name with either using repeating starting letters or rhyme as in, "Very Strawberry," which is smoothly a cute twist of pink. Every part of this idea is ok with the metaphor involved that she will take the time in her low cooking like letting a fruit ripen it's fullest as well as fruit being an option, LOL. This rolls with my criteria!
Coral Cafe is another resemblance of pink in a living way, so the food won't be too pasteurized from the stove! Also, there will be meat (taken from that it's a skeleton) and that there'll be plenty of different meals on the menu with yumminess branching down the throat. Good job, you're doing well. This has the ABC's of fulfillment in criteria. In a pouty mood at the third check, you pulled the rhythm with each syllable!
How pleasant "Pink's Paradise" is from that "paradise" is a garden of pleasure. She's created a mini gracious land of food and sifts for the finest. Sad to say, but my voice in criteria staggered the clearness of the name.
Please see why I would feel unhappy if you replied or rated my comment... But, I offer if you want to talk in your AU!
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Roses,
Daisy.
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