I told you that one sunny Wednesday
How I've always loved you.
You looked at me then turned away
Embarrassed
You don't know how that hurt.
The way my face burned bright red
The way my heart exploded right then and there,
Shattered,
Into tiny pieces no amount of glue can fix.
Because I know I will never in my life ever love again.
How you could be so heartless?
The way you never cared for me
You didn't even care enough for me to give me a response.
How could you do that
To a person?
I'm a human who feels love,
Who feels pain,
Who feels... ashamed.
There's a black hole where your heart is.
Sucking the heart out of me
Slowly but surely trying to let my desires perish
You couldn't just tell me that you didn't feel the same way?
You couldn't do me that one favor?
Do you not understand I would die for you?
I have cried over you!
I would love you more than anybody else could!
I loved you more than anybody else ever will
And I thought I would love you for all of eternity!
Why?
Why don't you even care?
I poured my heart out to you
I truly loved you with every ounce of my being!
I don't understand!
Who would have ever even contemplated this much emotional pain?
I would take on every single last one of your pains
If you would love me
Only your love can heal my mangled heart.
I can love you with great passion, care, and otherwise infinite appreciation.
If only you would love me.
I sit at home wondering at nights.
Wondering.
Thinking about you
I want to know what could have been.
I want to know why you can't love me.
I need to know.
I will never live with myself
I will never be the same person
I will never love again.
Doesn't that even mean somethings in your eyes?
Don't look at me and think how pathetic I am
Think about how heartless you are
Think about how you lost your heart
When the one you loved didn't love you.
Tell me how to lose a broken heart
That will never mend.
If only you knew what kind of painful, agonizing suffering I have been through.
If only you knew how I felt
If only you knew the sensation of happiness I feel when I'm near you.
If only you knew the misery I felt when you just turned away.
If only you could tell me to my face that you loved me
If only you knew that 'I love you' is just a simple phrase
If only you knew those words
Don't even start to describe
What I feel.
If only you knew.
I just wish you knew.
If only.
Author notes
Option(s) 5,9, Letter D
Well, this is my latest poem as of March 23rd, 2007! I decided to not make this one rhyme, because I have a lot of Rhyming poems, and it was time for a change. well, i really hope you felt my poem! Option 2 [but shh...dont tell her...] Lynne
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- Hey!!!!!! I Love Options Contests so here goes another one! (Prewrites Welcome) by Patience15.
525 points, ended April 20, 2007, 65 entries
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Comments
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i want to copy this whole poem in here, thats how much i love this one.
its absolutely amazing and it hits home. completely. if only he knew, i wish he knew how much i loved him.
finalists list for sure
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Aw!!!
Okay.
You have now placed a dopey smile on my face.
It's all cheesing and happy and yeah. Thank you!! You're the best!
I'm happy you like it. You have no idea how happy you've made me!
=D glad you likey!
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This is a very sad but very nice write. Love is not always perfect and sometimes it is so hard to understand. Thank you for your entry xxxx best wishes
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Aw!
Thank you! I think that love itself is perfect, with no flaw, it's the SIDE EFFECTS that seem to affect it. But yes, it's very hard to imagine. Sometimes it's very unfathomable. Which makes it hard to understand. Thank you for your thoughts. Good luck judging!
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Heartfelt
This is an extremely depe heart felt poem and I really loved how depe and e-motional you got in this poem. you really vented yourself beautifuly and hopefully the perosn this was diorected at got the message to never mess with you again. it is sad when a boy does that to another girl. there are other boys out there for ya so hang in there and you'll find that special someone in time. keep on penning away
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awww
awww you're the second person to say that!! i'm really glad that you felt the intense pain i was trying to put into it. i don't mean that you felt pain, but i mean i hope you really understood everything i meant. i hate when guys treat girls like me like trash, and then they give all the guys bad reps, and every girl thinks they should give up, and every guy is like that. thank you so much for reading and for commenting!!
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That is soo sad. I love the emotion and I was feeling really sorry for the person in the poem. It was beautifully tragic and was wonderfully written.
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You are so sweet! Thank you! I'm glad that you truly felt the message I was spreading to people. Don't mistreat others! Just let them know how you feel. I love the way you said, 'beautifully tragic', thank you!!
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when i was eight i saw two old dudes kissing in the park.. i thought that would be the gayest thing id ever see! thanks for changing my perspective... yeah? better for you too be blissfully happy while the significant other doesnt find you that significant?
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uhh...
uuuhhh... are you calling my poem gay?? wow... that's not nice. um... hmm.
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Wow. That guy sucks. Getting to love someone is a long hard journey, but getting over loving someone is even worse. Great job on making a long poem seem much shorter!
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lol
Wow, I'm loling at the 'That guy sucks' that was funny. Anyway, thank you for the comment! And you are so right! You fall in love when you least expect it, and it sends you on a roller coaster. I made it shorter? Really? Wow that's pretty cool. Thank you so much for viewing my poem!!!
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oueeeeee i like it... it was really sad thou
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Gracias, mi amigas!
Adios, Chica!! PEACE
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Wow. That's sad. It reminds me of this fic I read yesterday with a similar situation [it had a happy ending though].
Honestly, I believe in loving someone from afar, because people can be so unpredicable, and if you're not hard as steel you'll get hurt most often than not. It's the risk. It should be taken sometimes.
I love how you started it with the "Sunny Wednesday", sunny being happy and wednesday being in the middle of the week, I don't know, I think it's perfect.
Good Job. Hmm.
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Thank you all!!
I'm assuming a fanfic, but that is cool it had a happy ending. But sadly, not everybody gets their happy ending. Well, I agree with that, or your heart will be mashed into microscopic little pieces. But, a lot of true love would never be found unless they took the risk. Lol, I have no idea where the sunny Wednesday came from, because I guess it was that on Wednesday, like you said, is the middle of the week, and the weekend is too far away to be looked forward to, and the last weekend's fun has slowly drifted away. And I did mean to put the sunny, because sometimes that'll throw the reader off, into something they weren't expecting, because if it's a sunny day, most people will expect a happy ending, when that totally wasn't the case. I'm glad you think it's perfect! Nobody's had anything else to say about it! Nothing about punctuation, or anything! I think I have become very proud of this poem! Thank you!
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Heartfelt
This poem has blown me away, and has broken my heart at the same time...You brought me into your pain. Your lover became the antagonist...the seemingly villian in this dramatic piece...you have poured out your heart to not only this person, but to the world....so many people have felt this way, but never could express it....THANK YOU SO MUCH for sharing this with us here on AP! BRAVO!!!
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How thoughtful
Oops! I didn't mean to break your heart! sorry about that! didn't mean to break your heart! I didn't mean to make you feel any pain! I just wanted you to really understand what people go through. But I'm sure you grasped the concept. Ooh, I like that, 'the seemingly villain' that's a great way of putting it. I wanted whoever read this to feel like my best friend, telling her how i felt, and what i was going through. thank YOU so much for taking the time to read it!! 
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omg omg omg omg
I absolutly, positivly love this poem : i can totally relate love it
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U are so sweet!
aww thank you so very much! all of you have made my day!!! i didn't expect, honestly, for many people to read any of my poems, since it wasn't a new poem, or anything. i'm glad u can relate i'm happy that you like it you've just made me happy all over! thankies!!!!
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thats amazing, i swear, the imagrey was amazing and i do so hope that you write more like this
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Very kind
ooooohhh, you are so sweet! I'll try to write more like this but you really have to think to write it though! but not as much because you just have to look inside yourself. i'll try to write more like this, nonetheless!
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That was a great read. The ammount of emotion you were able to capture with the single worded lines was masterful. Kudos to this poem, I truly enjoyed it.
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I'm so happy!
you're too kind! i'm glad you really felt my poem! it means so much that all you guys will take time to comment and criticize! although i haven't really had criticism... nobody's had much criticism to say about it... not sure if that's a good thing or not. -
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Well I know it isn't easy to succinct so much emotion into single words like that. It was truly expert there.
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ooh march 23 was my birthday! anywho...i love your poem! it's absolutely amazing...i love the words and the phrases and just everything about it...it's awesomely pimp...
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lol
lol i like your comment, and i hope this would have been a great birthday gift! i wish you would have read it then, for your birthday, but it's okay because you still got to read it. thank you! i'm really glad you liked it!
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OMG I love this it is so awesome and I know how you feel...
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ooooo thank you muh love! but i don't think anybody should feel this way... but i guess if you never take chances to tell somebody you like them, what if they liked you back? well thankies!!! byebye!
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mature vision
Hey, I don't know you at all but wow you have an amazing vision and empathy for one so young. I was able to experience this emotion through your poem, not just read it. The repetition and extended length of this poignant poem reinforced cleverly the pain that is relentless for a person who is enduring this agony and the use of so many questions echoed the soul-searching, self-effacing nature of the mind of a spurned lover who just cannot let go. You are a very profound thinker, my friend. Be proud - it is a gift not shared by many adults. camus
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Great comment!
AW!!! Thank you very much! You are literally like the hundredth person to tell me i don't write my age. I'm glad you understood exactly what I was trying to input! Wow you use big words! I know what they all mean, but seriously... wow. And yeah, you're right, because I was going to stop at line 28, i think, but then i'm like, 'a heart doesn't shut off just like that!' and i remembered i should include the title somewhere, so i kept on going. Really? Me, a profound thinker? That's pretty big! I've been called smart, usually, or occasionally bright, but nobody's ever said that, and that means a lot to me! thank you, you don't know how much it means to me that you read it! Bye-bye!! Lynne
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And you say you're only 12?!?! Wow I was blown away by this. Especially because I can relate to it very well. But This is really good, its definitely better than what I write, and I am four years older than you! anyways... great job, it had a wonerful flow.
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Aww, I'm blown away by your comment!
That's so nice! LOL I get that a lot, everybody says I don't act my age. And that I certainly don't write like it. Now, I know this random poem can't be better than a 16-year-olds! I'm really glad you like this poem! This really makes me happy! I'm totally going to check out your poetry. You seem really cool. Well, I'll talk to you later!
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breath taking
hey long time no talkk!! this is peacefreak u know ivvy? I LUVVV THIS POEMMm IT ROXXXXX!!!!! this is way i felt when my ex bf broke up wit me....keep riting and inspiring others.
~Ivvy
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ooooo HI!
Hey!!!!!! it has been wayy too long! we have to catch up! i am so happy you liked the poem! that is awesome! when did you and your ex break up? i am so sorry! what can i do to help? why would HE break up with a girl like YOU? you are awesome!
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Wonderful
This is so beautiful and so sad at the same time. I can really relate to this poem, as you can see from some of my past poems. I love it!
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Thank you!
That is really cool of you! thank you! i'm so very glad you like it! thank you very much! I'm glad that you grasped the feeling i put into it! oh, by the way, i keep on trying to get to author's page, but whenever i click to try to look at it, it won't let me! and then, i 'search poet' and it says you don't exist! help! i wanna see ur poems and i can't see them w/o your author page! well i hope it's just a mistake! thank you so much again for reading my poem! bye!
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Oh.My.Gosh. This is awesome! Lynne, this has got to be ,like, your best one ever!!! Great job!!!!
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You're so sweet!
Thank you so very much! YOU are awesome! I'm happy you like it! thank you sooooo much! Lindsay you are so nice! how are you doing? we haven't talked in like, a baskillion years!
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Again you pull an amazing tale out of your head and weave it just right. Just right so the reader can feel the heart break. The rejection. The longing. You made it easy to follow and even though it was long you just can't stop reading it. Good Job.
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oh kimmie!
Thank you so very much Kimmie! I love the way you word your words of encouragement! I know I was a little worried because it was so long, but i figured that just made it seem real. Usually if you have a lovesick heart, it's like, a cold, long corridor of misery deep within the wretched depths of your heart, and so I wanted a long poem to symbolize that feeling. I am really glad you felt it just the way I wrote it, you felt exactly what I wanted you to feel. Thank you so much it means a lot!
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Wow... First off i have to say that this poem was... wow absolutely beautiful. It brought out so much emotion and sadness that really i didn't know how to stop reading it. I can relate so much to your poem it's insane. Really i'm left awestruck. Amazing and beautiful poem. Keep writing you have a beautiful and wonderful talent. Emily
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Wow!
Wow! Thank you so much. What I do with my poems is i try to make people feel it. I want to make people feel like they are standing in that person's shoes, and they are feeling the love sickness and pain that I put into my poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your contest really spoke to me. Usually I really will just look for contests to where I can enter a pre-write, but that title kept popping out at me, so I really wanted to write a poem, not just some rhyming diddle that makes no sense, although my first intention was to rhyme, I decided that if it was really going to come from the heart, usually your heart won't let your feelings rhyme, so I wanted as emotion and grief anybody could ever possibly feel. Although don't get me wrong, I love rhyming poems, but sometimes poems just don't need to rhyme. Well, thank you so very much for commenting on my poem. Good luck judging!
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