Words they spoke,
ran through my head.
They all seemed to poke,
at a soul that was dead.
Cold hearted witch they called me,
temptress from the shadows below.
No man in his right mind could ever see,
The heartless woman inside. They don't know.
They did not truly think that I could feel pain,
and I did not really know that I could feel hurt.
But your vicious lies have brought me such a shame,
Can't find the right words to express this dirt.
You spoke that short phase which I had longed to hear,
and you promised you wouldn't go.
Yet your truth was not so clear,
you've no good will to show.
So I shall now keep,
far from the words;
lies you speak.
Author notes
Yes it's personal. Well this is another experiment. Yeah I know it's rough. Basically what I did was add a syllable with each line. I started with three syllables two of which are accented and ended with the same. It needs work but whatever.
Please tell me what you think
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Wow!!
Powerful piece penned and also Powerful message
Thank You for sharing this and it takes Strength to do so
This appears like shape poetry in the form You made but also almost like a Etheree somewhat which has a syllable count..but just the shape..
I love to experiment with poetry too...
Wonderful job!!
Also You have been Hoodwinked by The Poetic Bandits
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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it's nice as is. *be happy*
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I like the structure... very artistic
Hmm it does sound personal, well penned.
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Were you trying to do a certain form because there is a form like this. Check out shadowpoetry.com I seem to think it begins with a P. Anyway, I can relate to a lot of this. It definently a rough piece though.
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