Exhale
Inhale
Exhale
Inhale
The pain is unbearable
I only say that
Because I've felt it my whole life
Exhale
Inhale
Exhale
Inhale
Sometimes it hurts to wake up
When everything feels like your in a painting
The warm and cool tones mixing together
Like water and oil
It doesn't mix
Exhale
Inhale
Exhale
Inhale
So entwined in you
I didnt want to leave
But I told you my dear
It only hurts when I breathe
A contest entry
- Titles For Everyone!!! by AllYoullNeverHave.
450 points, ended April 13, 2007, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very good right captures alot! I think you did wonderful on this!
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the ending to this was amazing, definately my favorite part. I also love how you compared things to a painting. A great imagery. I can relate to this too, only hurting when you breathe.
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genuine.
now this is the very essence of why i first loved poetry ever in the very first place!!!
!!! overall, there is an original mastery that you have really poured all over me!!!!
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God Bless & Take Care
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brian
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Wow this is amazing. I love the repetition of "Exhale, Inhale, Exhale, Inhale" That really adds an extra boost to the poem. I like the whole "feel" of this piece. Great job. Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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oh gosh
this is one of the best ive read so far on allpoetry.you really have a gift for expressing yourself.great job.
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