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Take My Hand

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Take my hand, I promise you,
I値l never let it go.
I値l take you to a special place,
where tender orchids grow.

In forest glades, on softest moss,
we値l lie, just you and I.
While nightingales will serenade,
their gentle lullaby.

As moonbeams dance across your face,
and dew drops kiss your eyes,
our arms entwined forever,
we値l gaze at midnight skies.

So come with me my darling,
and we will never part.
For if you give your hand to me,
I値l give to you my heart.

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  • Entwining Beauty
    November 25, 2007
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    amazingly written good luck


  • the-gifted
    September 24, 2007
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    aww this is very cute. i like it. thanks for entering into my contest and good luck.

  • Swimmin angel
    July 17, 2007

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    I love this poem. Its exactly what i wanted for this contest. It is so beautiful and magical. Thank you for entering!!


  • whiterabbit.
    June 10, 2007

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    I love this. It's so cute and sweet. You should be very proud of this, and I'm sure you are. I love the calm feeling that just floats over as you read. The flow is beautiful. This is a wonderful poem and I adore it. Thanks for entering.


  • Gay-Militant
    June 8, 2007

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    very entrancing! I write a lot of poetry like this, and i absolutely love the way you bring nature into human emotion. It is my favorite comparison for the human mind,and i feel you did this so professionally. Wonderful work.

    Blessed Be
    Kevyn


  • Dark Whispers
    May 26, 2007

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    astonding piece, very touch "
    So come with me my darling,
    and we will never part.
    For if you give your hand to me,
    I’ll give to you my heart"

    Wonderful line, it ties the piece together wonderfully


  • Procrastination
    May 22, 2007
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    Very nice.
    Goodluck in the contest.
    Emily x


  • MyrddinEmrys silver member
    April 8, 2007

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    Thanks and...

    Congratulations on your trophy. This is a sweetly flowing song of love and devotion, rich in image, softly rhymed.

    Peace and blessings, Rahad


  • sahdana silver member
    March 29, 2007
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    sweet and touching...

    very sweet and touching...thanx and all the best to you! peace & blessings


  • Vampire Seductress
    March 29, 2007
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    great job thanxs for entering


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    March 29, 2007
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    Thankyou for your lovely entry, Bella

  • bluecollarlove
    March 27, 2007
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    I Like It.

    I'm not a critic just can comment on what hits me and i like this


  • nobodys-girl
    March 26, 2007

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    it's beautiful...oh my gosh it's beautiful...i absolultly love it! thankyou so much for entering and good luck!


  • Afflicted Affection
    March 25, 2007
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    very beautiful picture and poem, great job, and i wish you good luck


  • Patience15
    March 24, 2007

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    This was absolutely beautiful. The last stanzas were my favorite really. Your son took a beautiful photo by the way and i think you used the title i chose very well. Beautiful poem keep it up. Emily


  • Bones-Addict
    March 23, 2007
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    Beautiful

    This is very beautiful, and well done.

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