Sea
breeze felt,
as waves crash,
splashing over
rocks.
Author notes
- The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of one,
two, three, four, one. -
^I've never done a lanturne before, so I tried. Hope you like it. Good luck judging! :]
A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #8 by Samplette.
425 points, ended March 23, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awsome lanturne!!!!!
now this is what poetry means to me. this is so stripped bare & yet so full of expression and mood that i feel like i am about to die & go straight to Heaven!!!!
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ten tons of roses for this one!!!!!
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God Bless,
bri
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thank you so much! it was my first time doing a lanturne. actually, I had never heard of this type of poetry before, so I decided to give it a try. I'm so glad you liked it!
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hey thats pritty cool!! i realy like it! its simple yet very discriptive! i love it!
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thank you!!
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this is a good lanturne, but the syllable count is 12341 ocean is 2. You have plenty of time to ammend it. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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woops...I completely looked over that. sorry about that. I changed it. thanks for the comment. good luck judging. :]
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