Blankets protect me
lingering on sleep’s edge.
A vision floats among the bits
and pieces of the words that are
always searching for each other.
As warmth build to comfort,
past the confines or words
a welcoming sense of sleep
is nurtured and ushered in.
The image longs to dream
she used to love me – fades
should haves and could haves
so many useless thoughts.
A quiet, sacred place remains
for the tiny light that beckons
My silenced mind answers
wordless replies
the casting of burdens
my shell of humanity
for lights embracement.
I dream.
I long for the light I follow
It skitters and shimmers
Outside of reality.
Drawing me past memory
Beyond need or lust
I follow the Night Goddess
Entranced anticipation.
Summer sun.
Warmth of love.
Green grass
touches softly.
Light
embraces morning.
Author notes
Opt. 2 Night Goddess
In a list
A contest entry
- Just Another Boring Contest by Angel With No Halo.
725 points, ended March 27, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This really is quite a lovely piece. Your words are meshed so wonderfully here. I want to applaud you for a job well done. Thanks again for the entry
~Krys~
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Wonderful work here! I really enjoyed reading
this piece. Thanks for sharing this and best
of luck to you with it in the contest!
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thanks Jeremy, it was and is my pleasure
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This is very very good.
My silenced mind answers
wordless replies
the casting of burdens
my shell of humanity
for lights embracement.
Your words were like a warm cup of tea to my soul as I love the way you wrote this and gave this such a pleasant twist as to what I was imagining for this title. Great work here hon. Thank you for entering and good luck
~Krys~
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It was not what I had in mind when I choose this title ether, such is the wonder and freedom of free writing.
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Nice Nice Nice
"Blankets protect me lingering on sleep's edge."
Already you have set the stage with this line.
These:
"she used to love me – fades
should haves and could haves
so many useless thoughts."
Ahh, these tell of resolve. Knowing to dwell is pointless and moving on is essential. Here is the hope for better things ahead.
Well done dear soul. Very well done. I hope you do very well in this contest. ~Pamela
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thanks pam, now if only I could truely sleep so well lol
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"Entranced anticipation.
Summer sun.
Warmth of love.
Green grass
touches softly.
Light
embraces morning."
Ahhh, this is a lovely & contemplative penning, my Friend...The essence of what we writers encounter at night is beautifully described...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie...
Wanda
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had to fix a couple major grammer / misspells but I hope it does well. I like it
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