Sleep, sleep little darling.
Nothing can harm you.
Your on top of the world,
On top of the world.
Fall back, into the seas of your dreams,
And don’t let the sounds of the ignorant
Wake you from your beautiful sleep.
Sleep, sleep.
Dream of the next day to come,
Dream of the only one,
For you.
I won’t let anything hurt you,
I will not close my eyes,
You are so beautiful,
When your sleeping tonight.
Sleeping so tight.
Sleeping alright.
Sleeping.
On top of the world,
How does it feel?
When your floating above,
All the hate that is here?
Sleep,
Close your eyes,
Fall into,
The most glorious sleep of your life.
Sleep darling,
Sleep tonight.
A contest entry
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Honorable mention
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Such a wonderful and calming poem. Almost like a lullaby. I could picture my daughter Jasmine sleeping while I read this beautiful write. Wonderful imagery and emotions. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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This is a beautiful write, and a very enjoyable read.
As others have said it flows well, and is like a lullaby a nurturing mother would sing to her children. Well written.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Sleep-N -
Good
Watching the one you love sleep. Whether it's your spouse or a child they look so peaceful. I remember my husband many nights sitting in his chair when he couldn't sleep watching over me. I felt safe. Very beaautiful write
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i really like this one. as others have said, good flow and yes it has a calming effect. this is a good one for a lullaby, i would sing this to my kid for real! yes i like it much, it brings out good feelings which i dont get very often. nice job
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Wow. The poem had an awesome flow to it. It had a calming effect, and I loved it. It was so beautiful. Such a sweet tribute to a child. Write on!
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The most glorious sleep of your life.
Sleep darling,
Sleep tonight.
I love the pace and the concept of the verse here bringing a kind of peace and the soothing effect of the music of life here..I loved the structure and the mode effecting somewhere inside about the universal flow of the life..this is an amazing write ..you have touched the depth and touched the beauty of the message..Indeed this is a wonderful write my friend...
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This reminded me of a soothing lullaby. Just beautiful I thought of my baby girl as I read this lovely write. Good luck and thanks for entering
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Very nicely written
A fine piece of poetry this is -
Lovely poem, I enjoyed reading it as it's very soothing, almost like a lullaby.
angelica
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excellent
This is stunning. I can almost create a tune to be sung with it. It is so peaceful and there seems to be such love and nuture in the words. Does this poem possibly relate to the eternal sleep? Or am I interpreting this differently to what you wanted to say?
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This has a gentle flow that is remniscient of a lullabye. I am not too sure of some of the punctuations, but that may be more personal preferneces than any thing else.
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e 
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A nice poem
I liked the idea and the flow. If you would like this considered then would you mind doing the following edits before submitting. -
this was a great write..it flowed smootly and was so intense to read..i couldnt stop until the end..this was an awesome poem and i hope you never stop penning
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Beautiful Reality, feeling, and love.
Amazing poem.
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This is very beautiful!
This would be a great lullaby
to sing to a child. Thanks for
sharing this piece here and good
luck to you with it!
Jeremy0826 -
this is a very sweet and innocent piece. I can tell you really love this person and only want the best for them. You want there dreams to be safe. great job and good luck!
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I love the visual in this poem, you did a wonderful job of writing this poem. I think that you are a wonderful poet at least from this poem. I do believe you did a wonderful job of this poem. Keep up your great wrting.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
~Alix -
that was absolutely heartbreakingly gorgeous. Beautiful and tender, sweet and soft. A lullaby unto itself. How beautifully crafted!
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Beautiful poem, La! Keep up the good work!
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