I have but only one day,
They say, before I die.
Twenty-four hours,
To say my last goodbyes.
I think I would keep it to myself,
Not burden anyone,
But I'd definitely take the day off,
Find her and have some fun.
I would take her to places,
That we've only seen in dreams.
We would run and laugh,
And sing and dance,
I'd watch her smile just gleam.
I'd look at her and hold her tight,
Not wanting to let go.
I'd pick her up and kiss her lips,
My love for her I'd show.
When evening comes we'd snuggle in,
As we slowly drift to sleep,
This amazing day and memory,
I know she'll always keep.
When she wakes and I am gone,
This day may be her worst,
But she'll always have the memory
Of the day, that we,
Had Heaven here on Earth
A contest entry
- ~~If you knew today was your last day on earth how would you spend it?~~ by Sweetangelgrace.
475 points, ended April 5, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful ending - the smile is a beautiful trace of happiness - as said below - fluent and such lamenting bliss.
Thanks for entering,
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This piece brings smile to the readers faces. It gives a shed or a trace of happiness.
My favorite lines:
I would take her to places,
That we've only seen in dreams.
We would run and laugh,
And sing and dance,
I'd watch her smile just gleam.
Wonderful! Nice write!
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
~VIRGOAN~
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Rhe best.....you made me feel heaven on earth...wow!
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So sweet and a really beautiful write, as always lol A nice way to spend your last day thats for sure :-) well done and good luck in the contest!
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I've already read and commented on this.. but it made me cry..
Angie -
This is splendid. You have succeeded very well writing on this. I love the last paragraph. A powerful conclusion. Lots of love first Regards and blessings.
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What a beautiful write! I love it! I only wish that someone could write such beautiful poetry like this for me! Well done! Good luck in the contest! xxx
"I'd look at her and hold her tight,
Not wanting to let go.
I'd pick her up and kiss her lips,
My love for her I'd show."
"When evening comes we'd snuggle in,
As we slowly drift to sleep,
This amazing day and memory,
I know she'll always keep."
I loved these 2 stanzas the best, there so affectionate! =D One of my favourite pieces yet! xxx
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This makes me smile.. but also brings tears to my eyes.. You're not allowed to leave.. you're too good..
Whoever this girl is.. she's very lucky.
I LOVE this!!
Angie
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Umm...yea...I think you may know her
...very, very well in fact
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Beautiful
This is just so breath-takingly beautiful and touching. Brought a tear to my eye. Best of luck in the contest.
Bravo
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this is so beautiful and touching, a truly wonderful piece. the ending is perfect in every way, just like the rest of the poem.
a wonderful write, good luck in the contest
lucy
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I loved your poem. It was so touching I almost cry...Beautiful. This was. I cant describe it.
the wording was perfect and made me picture your feelings completely.
It really touched me and it was impressive.It just tore me apart reading it! It's great. good work !=)=)
Many blessings sent your way and thanks for entering my contest!
~~GRACE~~
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Whyitt this is beautiful. Yuor words seem to sing from the heveans ubove. you are a very gifted poet. *sigh* Wonderful write.
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