Look to the skies above
Realize the notions
what I want to give
You my love
Forming for remorse
You'll hear my voice
Hold my hand and know
I am of God's grace
I hold you tight
And relenquish fear
Wipe away your tears
And you'll know that I'm here
Your heart may bleed
Never seeming to stop
The blood drips out
But I'll catch every drop
Name of pure
Wings are torn
Help me to show you
There's more
Look to the skies above
Drink from the hands
That show the purist form
Of my love
Forming for remorse
You'll hear my voice
Hold my hand and know
I am of God's grace
I hold you tight
And relenquish fear
Wipe away your tears
And you'll know that I'm here
Your heart may bleed
Never seeming to stop
The blood drips out
But I'll catch every drop
Name of pure
Wings are torn
Help me to show you
There's more.
A contest entry
- The Anything You Want Contest (Prewrites Allowed) by KittieLyyn.
350 points, ended April 1, 2007, 96 entries
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Is a poem dedicated to my love and to Jesus.
Comments
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OMGoodness
AAAAAAMMMMMAAAAZZZZZIIIIINNNNNNGGGG! Wow.
Your heart may bleed
Never seeming to stop
The blood drips out
But I'll catch every drop
Name of pure
Wings are torn
Help me to show you
There's more.
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the flow is kinda etchy though toward the end of the stanza it works well. The rhyming scheme wasn't clear
yet it sound good though
bbut perhaps remember to keep the pattern the same
My thoughts are i thought the rhyming scheme being unclear and so might of heeded the emotions a bit. It made it more sentiment, emotionless
keep penning
I love the first stanza -
Im not quite sure what to make of this...whether maybe it is a poem of love or not...guess i will think on it a lil more...amazing write!
MINDIE
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good repetition
This poem has a unique and effective repetition throughout. Written from from the view point of Christ it is uplifting and optimistic. The four lined, free verses are each effective in their own right and the concluding lines sum up the theme well.
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thank you
Thank you for your entry to this contest. I will write a comment on your poem in a few days when I finish the judging.
Richard
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This is good! I like your choice of words. Very different! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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thank you so much
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THiiS WRiiTE iiS BEAUTiiFUL.....THANKS FOR SHARiiNG THiiS WiiTH ME!
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