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Confessions From Another Extension

Sitting here, pondering-- wondering about tomorrow and, everything that still 

remains beyond my reach as though a ladder wasn't tall enough to

reach its victim; but for this moment,

my mind stares, thinking up of ways to disappear...

 

To be submerged underneath the weight of solace

pentatrating the very core of eaten away canvas

and, still these remaining tears stung like acid

 

Decomposed but fermented with good 'bones'

she was easily renovated into newer construction

 

Memoirs of glass replaced inside the boxes

while broken tree limbs were taken, stripped,

and, finally, reused

 

In last desparation to running with the wind,

windows were conclusively open as remnants

of fallen petals embedded themselves alongside

every recess - every corner plastering an endless

circle to feel freedom 

 

Author notes

CONFESSIONAL POETRY
Refers to a type of narrative and lyric verse which deals with the facts and intimate mental and physical experiences of the poet's own life. In confessional poetry, the speaker often describes his confused chaotic state, which becomes a metaphor for the state of the world around him/her.


Part Onw is located here:
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Image: Fallen Petals
Photorgraper/Artist: Unknown
Site credit: http://www.bradknapp.com/blog/archives/000307.html

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    April 6, 2007

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    This poem has 17 lines and the maximum for this contest is 15. Perhaps you should consider submitting another poem. It is well written but does not conform to our rules.


  • -Ink Artist-
    March 27, 2007

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    Very stark and bold, true confessional qualities for sure! The derivative metaphor used is excellent in relation to what I know about your past. Fantastic insight into you as a person. The word "conclusively" in line 19 seems out of the norm for your flow. Typo in line 7 "weight". Minor things, for this piece is striking and brutal, emotionally charged from the pit of your stomach.


    ~Lori


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    March 23, 2007

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    i can't even think about what to say with this, the words were strong and they just get to you, keep it flowing

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    March 23, 2007

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    I love this, was a few minor mistakes but perhaps I am reading this prior to your finishing editing as I have never noticed any of your work with spelling or grammar errors before. I can totally relate to this write and it is as if you was in my head when you wrote it, which by the way is not a safe place to be.
    You get three yellow happy clappy guys from me dear!


  • layla.
    March 23, 2007
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