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The scent

It's smell is intoxicating
I know if I were to i might die
But it had me hooked the first time I tried
I reach for the smell that helped me through saddest times
My friends pull me back
Without I am someone no one wants to be around
Some one thought of as an outsider
someone not worth the time

With out it I go crazy
Desk are tipped
doors are slammed
pencils are broken
feeling are hurt
Tempers flare
Depression strikes
Stealing occurs
Lies are told
Promises are broken
and so are souls

I wouldn't be going through this if only I had stayed away
But I was a lonely 11 year old girl
The scent lifted me up so high
Drove the pain away from me
When it was gone I went plummeting to the ground
And hit harder then before


With out it I go crazy
Desk are tipped
doors are slammed
pencils are broken
feeling are hurt
Tempers flare
Depression strikes
Stealing occurs
Lies are told
Promises are broken
and so are souls

I look in the mirror and see a different girl
Not me with dark circles under my eyes
Gray hair sprouting from my 12 year old head
Look what the scents done to me

With out it I go crazy
Desk are tipped
doors are slammed
pencils are broken
feeling are hurt
Tempers flare
Depression strikes
Stealing occurs
Lies are told
Promises are broken
and so are souls

It's time stop this madness
my friends pull me away from the scent
The scent that stopped my sadness
But now it's time to let it go

Author notes

Option 3. My addiction was smelling sharpies. I started in fifth grade when the whole class was getting high off markers. I did too. My best and only friend at the time wasn't in that class. The moment the scent caught my nose I was hooked. We all knew the dangers we learned how to get high off markers from an article about the dangers of sniffing. For more then a year I still did this. It felt good. I made lots more friend and it wasn't becuase i got high but I made myself believe that as an excuse. I loved the feeling and i wasn't gonna admit the problem without a fight but in sixth grade about a month ago I saw a really sad video. i cracked broke down and told some of my friends, they help me through the tough times. My angry mood. Getting on alot of peoples nerves but they took it. i cut and stole to get through the tough times of course my parents never heard any of this. But I'm getting back to normal. Soon I'll be all better.

Option 7

option 2

option 1

Poetry is about imagery and emotion
I think i got all reference to self mulation

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  • Rejected Freak
    May 9, 2007

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    Wow..I can't believe you were able to write this piece at such a young age..It's outstanding. It has taken me years to get to where I am, and it seems you have already blown past me. You are deff. going to be something big in your future..I am glad you have overcome your struggle..You are too much of a precious soul to be lost to the feeling of being 'high'

    It's just not worth sacraficing yourself for.

    thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    May 5, 2007

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    I have heard of and have done it myself, getting high off of sharpies and other brands of permanent and dry erase board markers but I have never heard of anyone becoming addicted to them. That is one addiction I had not encountered until reading this. I am glad to hear that you will be getting better soon and that you have friends to help you out. Thank you for entering!


  • renizzle
    April 8, 2007
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    Wow, it's good. it's honest, but is still artistic. the repeating stanza is a little long to read over and over, also, your last line seems forced to fit the rhyme scheme.overall:well done. good luck with taking control of your life back--you can do it!

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    April 8, 2007
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    Good write, Kim. Thanks for entering my contest.
    Lots of luck to you.
    Brian


  • Heavens Child
    April 5, 2007

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    This is a powerful poem.... I'm sure many can relate to the power that things can have over us. You've done an excellent job portraying the insanity of this. Thanx for the entry in my contest.


  • Valley Girl silver member
    March 31, 2007

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    This is a good write, very personal and sad. I had an addiction myself, it was Gravol, I never thought that something so small and simple could ever become addictive. I started hiding them, and needing to take more and more just so I could get to sleep. I finally stopped, but it did take a long time, and whenever I need to take one I still get a little scared that I will become addicted again, even though I was going through this in highschool. Thanks for submitting this in my contest.


  • Dark Whispers
    March 31, 2007
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    you poem excedes limit of line permitted in a poem, if you wish you can enter a new poem.


  • Romily
    March 31, 2007
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    you have really got the creativity to reveal ur feelings.....oh...awesome!!!
    indeed marvellos


  • Afflicted Affection
    March 23, 2007

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    wow great job, i didnt think anyone would actually do this option and i give you two thumbs up on this one. great job!

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