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The Infinite Heat of Unconditional Love


 

 

The essence of life’s gift is love’s beauty
Every off’ring sparks spiritual heat
Igniting the spirits innermost fire
Feelings of sacredness and pure passion
Blessed with experiencing divine love
Times of personal triumph and ecstasy

Minds will yearn for controlling ecstasy
Fighting nature to harness its beauty
Efforts so fruitless without blessed love
Lacking the essence of intensive heat
Unable to spark the needed passion
Cold and unable to ignite love’s fire

  Yet, one can ignite spirits to shine fire
And cause the soul to revel in ecstasy
In the framework of natural passion
Enhancing experiential beauty
By intending the inner spirit’s heat
Through offering unconditional love

But what if circumstances test our love
And throw us into confusion’s fire
We must not fold under jealousy's heat
We must not choose fear over ecstasy
If we adhere to natural beauty
We can each tame our loves jealous passions

The boundless limitless lover’s passions
That come from giving truly selfless love
Carry us to a place of such beauty
In one another’s eyes we can see fire
We can drink through our eyes in ecstasy
Filling our souls with passion’s heat

Hand in hand in hand we increase this heat
Lift geometrically loves passions
To a world of spiritual ecstasy
Where we can share more than just our own love
And bring this new fuel to passion’s fire
Adding new layers of meaning and beauty

The spark of such soulful organic fire
Fueled by the beauty of our selfless love
Ignites in passion's blaze of ecstasy

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 19

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    Now normally the continual repeating of the end words would drive me nuts.. but it was done so well it didn't distract me from the message.

    Stunning write!

  • chordphrute
    September 17

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    Hello and thank you for entering!

    Firstly, your structure works here. Yes of course there are constraints to the structure as far as form, but in terms of a visual aspect, your piece works center-justified, in italics, etc. People often overlook the visual aspects of poetry I think, both authors and readers. However it looks like you at least thought about it for a bit, which is lovely to see!

    Your piece is very 'heavy-handed'. Right from the glance at the title, your reader can tell it's going to be an emotional toil of a private life situation, and 'infinite heat' is certainly a strong image to place in a title. I think it works here.

    I think you did a fabulous job in choosing your end-words. They are abstract enough to actually make sense in each of your settings and so many people try to be clever by adding odd words that just end up looking out of place, which is where they get into trouble - so, nice job with your word-choice.

    I like your diction - it works, it's familiar and accessible to your readers. It's fluid.

    A criticism - no matter what you write on the page, in the back of your head, remind yourself that each individual line of every piece of poetry you write should in itself be a poem. That said, in terms of cliche phrases, your piece could use a little tinkering. Think of how many pieces you read that use things like "life's gift", "pure passion", "experiencing divine love", etc etc. I think you're much more clever than that and could utilize metaphor or simile here to enhance the piece.

    The envoi - nice. I love 'organic fire'... in fact it becomes a recurring theme, which I always high-five.

    Overall, this is a very hard form to work on and you did a great job. Thanks for entering!

  • Kleyda14
    June 2, 2007
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    Beautiful poem. Well done.

  • Cinnarry gold member
    May 27, 2007
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    I like it. Three doses of the clap for you


  • cheaphotelsign
    May 23, 2007

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    really nice. appreciated the 'code of ethics' (for lack if a better word) included. very sensual. rousing imagery. so many good points here. this is tasty.


  • Laura
    May 20, 2007
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    ohhh wow this is beautiful xxx


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    May 18, 2007

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    I think I am particularly intregued by this passionate stanza.

    Yet, one can ignite spirits to shine fire
    And cause the soul to revel in ecstasy
    In the framework of natural passion
    Enhancing experiential beauty
    By intending the inner spirit’s heat
    Through offering unconditional love

    Brings a lot of thoughts and images to mind - makes you think about the energy and passion of fire.

    Your poem holds a lot of wisdom and you put a lot of thought into it. Very very good .. I love it.


  • AgeofAquarius
    May 17, 2007

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    Unconditional love defined to perfection

    But what if circumstances test our love
    And throw us into confusion’s fire
    We must not fold under jealousy's heat

    We must not choose fear over ecstasy
    If we adhere to natural beauty
    We can each tame our loves jealous passions

    The boundless limitless lover’s passions
    That come from giving truly selfless love

    Natural beauty tames loves jealous passion opening up selfless love.

    Very powerfully expressed truths.


  • Laura Lamarca
    May 17, 2007

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    Oh this is a true beauty of a poem that oozes wisdom and great understanding. Unconditional love is a rarity these days and this write instils the hope that maybe one day, I shall find this too, for I feel the time has come that I deserve such a gift. This was so filled with wonderful description that I didn't notice it was a sestina until I read your authors notes and looked at the end line rhymes. The work of a true poet, my friend. Thank you for sharing.
    La x

  • luvdrkchocolate
    May 13, 2007

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    Oh. This is quite some poem that you have in here. I liked the title a lot so I had to come and click on it to see what it was about. It seems like you put a lot of time and effort into this one because it seems very metered to me. It worked well for when I was reading it outloud. It sounded like it was almost something all new couples should read together as it's good ideas on life and learning to love.

  • LadySatineTundra
    May 13, 2007

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    OoOoH Satine loved this! Yes yes yes! But you use so ever big words! Sometimes I did not understand.

    It made me blush for it is a beautiful dedication to two lovelies. Yes yes! Much clapping for you!

    Do you have to choose over them? Why?
    You must obviously love each of course
    because your words are the rythm of
    a heartbeat in play.

    Whats an inds? Such a tiny word but it made no
    sense to me. No no not at all.

    I can hardly wait to see what else
    you put pen to. Oh so exciting!

    >grins<

    Satine

    . Rewarded 8


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    Obviously, Amera hasn't told you
    about the night we spent together...oops.



    Lane


  • Rose Angel gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Well,at last you have appeared, and come on stage with a marvellous work This sestina is a masterpiece,and the subject of love, who can describe its' mystery, but that special word, unconditional love is the key.As we all agree! You have marvellously explained how it can be so no matter what..Yes, there have been tests, and our dearest friend and darling knows it the best...Enduring love...and the grace to keep exercising it when communication one of our worst enemies, I personally find is what makes one think love has waned....Your background suits this subject...Tried by fire! Right! And peace in the midst of the storm!

    . Rewarded 8

  • EncounteredEpiphany
    May 12, 2007

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    Spiritually Enlightening

    This Is an Masterpiece there were so many words that were metaphorically transmitting. I spiritually felt myself gliding on a true journey of the Compassionate Declaration of true love and piece.

    Bravo!

    Lo-Amo Salute!!!!!


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    May 12, 2007

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    inds and et confused me a bit. a great write for your friends. thank you for sharing this with me. this form and i do not get along and i admire you for being able to do this. viyanna rosemarie

    . Rewarded 4


    • PerVirtuous gold member
      May 13, 2007
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      Somehow two letters were dropped when I copied and pasted. I have edited. Thanks for the eyes.

  • Lonewolf2008 gold member
    May 12, 2007

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    ver y nice my friend

    open your heart and let the light shine out and upon the page of this. thoughtful and caring with love and filled with hope and betterdays.


  • ScarletO
    May 12, 2007

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    This is a fantastic poem on the spiritual side of uncnditional love. My prayers be with them both for their hardships to be release and taken. Wonderful job of poetic finese'.

    . Rewarded 4


  • myrataal silver member
    March 23, 2007
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    Wonderful words.


  • WarmHeartedGeisha
    March 23, 2007
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    O WOW this is just beautiful,


  • PoetsAngel
    March 23, 2007
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    This is the first thing I have read in such a long time, and it's simply beautiful, it has quite taken my breath away.

    Love

    Cathy


    • PerVirtuous gold member
      March 23, 2007

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      And I do Sooooooooooo love Cathy! Thank you. I miss you. Where you been?

      • PoetsAngel
        March 23, 2007

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        I'm right here, where I always have been, you havn't needed me, but I'm here now

  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    March 22, 2007
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    Sestinamazing!


  • Maddogk
    March 22, 2007

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    Wow, an amazing poem for two amazing ladies...
    You are brilliance on legs my friend...
    Simply stunning..

    Jeffro

    • PerVirtuous gold member
      March 22, 2007
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      Sucks to be me, don't it? Ha ha ha! Thanks for the kind words.

  • Amera gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    Woo Woo!! Leave it to our man to do a Sestina! The hardest form to write! Done perfectly for his girls; I love it its perfect and full of love. Now see if someone can top that kind of love.

    Love,
    Amera

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