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ohh big brother

ohh big brother
you make me strive

ohh big brother
you make me love
want
feel
know
the hope

ohh big brother
whom i love with a deep passion
a fierce fire of togertherness
you give me a path
a determination
a song in the silence
a light in the darkness
  a letter of hope on the blank page of my heart

ohh big brother
you give me a way
a clearing in the forest of confusion

ohh big brother
whom i love with a striving heart
you are my spark

the noises from your soul
the sounds from your mind
  the music from your spirit
 
ohh big brother
you are my carriage
my wheel
my rock

you show me
the path

you lead me
the way

you give me
the hope
the love
a piece of your heart

when you leave
ohh big brother

when you depart
ohh big brother

what shall i do?

my song
my light
my letter of hope
my spark
my noises
my sounds
my music
my carriage
my wheel
my rock
my path
my way
my hope
my love
my piece of your heart

gone

ohh big brother what shall i do?

when the rain abandons the plants, as the sun drifts away, and the moonshine fades, as the darkness envelopes the presence, and all that fueled, and fired, and moved, gone. the growth ceases and the love proves a fantasy, when the hope in the eyes of the cub are dirtied by the dust of its mother's ashes when the diamond fills dim, no longer flowing.
when the spark of the fire and the sun of the plant and the river of the ocean cease to be.

my hope
my faith
my love

my big brother

gone

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  • NickelleteXninja
    May 14, 2007

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    Normally i would hate the way this was laid out but i love this poem.. it speaks to me.. it hurts me... its all the emotions you tried to show


  • Abidoodle333
    April 28, 2007
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    wow this is really really good
    great job and good luck
    Abidoodle