ohh big brother
you make me strive
ohh big brother
you make me love
want
feel
know
the hope
ohh big brother
whom i love with a deep passion
a fierce fire of togertherness
you give me a path
a determination
a song in the silence
a light in the darkness
a letter of hope on the blank page of my heart
ohh big brother
you give me a way
a clearing in the forest of confusion
ohh big brother
whom i love with a striving heart
you are my spark
the noises from your soul
the sounds from your mind
the music from your spirit
ohh big brother
you are my carriage
my wheel
my rock
you show me
the path
you lead me
the way
you give me
the hope
the love
a piece of your heart
when you leave
ohh big brother
when you depart
ohh big brother
what shall i do?
my song
my light
my letter of hope
my spark
my noises
my sounds
my music
my carriage
my wheel
my rock
my path
my way
my hope
my love
my piece of your heart
gone
ohh big brother what shall i do?
when the rain abandons the plants, as the sun drifts away, and the moonshine fades, as the darkness envelopes the presence, and all that fueled, and fired, and moved, gone. the growth ceases and the love proves a fantasy, when the hope in the eyes of the cub are dirtied by the dust of its mother's ashes when the diamond fills dim, no longer flowing.
when the spark of the fire and the sun of the plant and the river of the ocean cease to be.
my hope
my faith
my love
my big brother
gone
A contest entry
- Sibling Love by Abidoodle333.
700 points, ended April 28, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let me feel the loss by NickelleteXninja.
600 points, ended May 14, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Battle of the Bronze by th3sl4y3r.
580 points, ended June 14, 2007, 107 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Normally i would hate the way this was laid out but i love this poem.. it speaks to me.. it hurts me... its all the emotions you tried to show
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wow this is really really good
great job and good luck
Abidoodle


