My sweet seductress, how beautiful you are!
I long for you, the solace of your mysterious prescence
Brushing, lingering on my translucent skin.
How could I refuse your poisened chalace?
To drink from your deep well of shadowed thoughts;
Liquid, living death soothing my gasping throat,
Your forbidden fruit, my bitter addiction.
And yet my stronger passion is a hatred
Of how I crave for you, my controlling mistress.
For every hour passed turbulently as one with you
Creeps by many more alone and silently weeping
As I wish for the life beyond your power
That once, so long ago now, I took for granted.
My angel, consume me or reject me but I beg,
Taunt and tempt me no longer.
Author notes
about depression, how it is the unchanging rock i cling too while wishing it could be different, that i could let go.
option 7
A contest entry
- y.o.u. a.r.e the [perfect] DRUG. x♥x by noir eyes.
300 points, ended March 26, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 171st Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 25, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think, be critical
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...Congrats on the honorable mention... although I have to ask, I am sorry if I just missed it somehow, what is it that you are dependent on?
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Sometimes, what one feels, is way more intense than depression. It is pure mental fatigue and it can be life crippling. I know; I've been in that place...
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest -
ok being honest, i almost didnt comment this poem. but then SOMETHING grasped me and i had 2 read it over. it is actually very good and very true. so many things in life are our angels of death. good luck on the contest!
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It's a nice effort paid attension towards this piece. I like the lines where I thought it would be the most rememberable. =)
"Liquid, living death soothing my gasping throat,
Your forbidden fruit, my bitter addiction."
Yeah, depression is very tough when trying to surpass it on your own, but we are human after all. Cheer up, and I hope you aren't feeling like this right now. =) There are many other things you can concentrate on. Just wait and see hey? And also I agree on most things on what daisygirlk has said, about the depression part.
Best luck in your future writings and in everything your future pathway,
Good Luck and Farewell...
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Great
depression is very difficult, it is so easy to cling to and so hard to get away from, a journey down to the depths of the ocean with no relief. Once caught you can't seem to escape, and it always want to return to you. A never ending battle. Your poem really showed the battle and the mixed emotions of depression, which is far from a one sided state of being, it is multifaceted and can be as relieving as it is frustrating.
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