Kristin Rides by Amera at All poetry

Kristin Rides

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I love her
O she makes my heart stir
golden as she rides across the sky

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She mounted my heart and soared so high
flying to a mystical, secret place of love
for the saddle of my heart, fits her like a glove

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Joined together above
Kristin Rides

Author notes

Trois-par-Huit

The Trois-par-Huit is a short eight line poetic form that is striking and fun to play with.
This form was created by Lorraine M. Kanter and goes by a few other names as well, the Octa tri and the Three by Eight just to name a few.

The structure of the Trois-par Huit is easy to compose as it only has three stanzas of 3,3,2 or 3,2,3, lines which can be decided on your own personal taste.
As with many forms the Trois-par-Huit has a syllable count, 3,6,9,12,12,9,6,3 and a rhyming scheme of AAB BBC CC or if you were to choose the 3,2,3, line stanza it would be AAB BB CCC.

The last line of the poem should be the title of the piece and should summarize what the poem is about.

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Auburn Sunrise
June 27, 2008

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Gorgeous. What a tribute!

I love the theme, style, and even the background is perfectly suited!
mysticstorm
March 28, 2007

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How very lovely and true to form. What an amazing dedication to a friend.
Your words would lift the spirit of the devil himself.
Will done as always, but this is outstanding in a tribute.
I am sure you made her smile.
Best to you!
Rose Angel
March 22, 2007

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Ethereal,,and very Powerful..Loving Dedication to a Friend!
Amera, you are shining once again in this wonderful style of poetry..but even that taken aside the one who you give the limelight, your dearest friend Kristin,in such wonderful loving imagery.For we that love her, we cannot discount the wonderful fondness we have for our Kristin,"I love her, how she makes my heart soar golden as she rides across the sky!""She mounted my heart and soared so high,"my saddle fit her heart like a glove""Joined together above Kristin Rides" This has such an impact on the readers....We know Kristin to be an endearing love to us all....Being such a visionary in her works and life. It is so suitable to see her riding in the sky....for she is ethereal in thought...Amera, a masterpiece!
Maddogk
March 22, 2007

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Got to agree with you there, Kristen does Ride. She also ROCKS...
You certainly have a way with forms, Amera.
Excellent work..
Got my seal of approval...

Jeffro
rlmcmd
March 22, 2007
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Excellent
Such a lovely, excellent poem and structure. Love the picture too. Bob
CassetteTapeHeroine
March 22, 2007

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Nice job, this poem is very emotional and honest. I also like the format you used. keep up the great work.
Vampiric Essence
March 22, 2007

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Great.
This poem is amazing. It is very short but it is just long enough to have great meaning. I really like the form of poetry that you used. I may have to practice using it. I really hope you keep writing and maybe publish a poem or two.
Spiritvision angel
March 22, 2007

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This is a beautiful write with heartfelt passion in each word. Tank you for sharing this .
John Timothy Bailer
March 22, 2007

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interesting
i found this piece to be interesting because i have never seen this form before. it certainly makes for an interesting read. i think you got you feelings of love you are feeling across well. thank you for sharing this style with us. Tim aka childofthenight
Soulful Woman
March 22, 2007

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Oh dear friend...
I know of whom you write...An amazing creature of this time and space..filled with a heart of love..
A beautiful tribute to a wonderful woman.
And of course a new style of writing...where does it all come from.??? lol
Soulful Woman
Barbara
March 22, 2007

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I don't think I've read a Trois-par-Huit before, and you make it look so appealing! Wonderful imagery and slow to this poem.
Im3
March 22, 2007

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You simply amaze me with your knowledge of the genre. So many writers possess skills, but no history or insight. You have the package. You pen very simple lines which make the reader think, Gosh, where have I heard that before., LOL. I loved it!!
candy-coated-razors
March 22, 2007

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i like this write it very powerful i can feel what you feel...keep up the great work and god bless all!!!
Cyanide Angel
March 22, 2007

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i like the layout of the piece! i think its cool how you used a different form fot this piece...it just fits!
Elfin
March 22, 2007

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For the saddle of my heart, fits her like a glove.
That has got to be the strongest line in this poem, I wish I had written it, it's fantastic. I like the rest of the poem as well just in case I forgot to mention it lol, but that line has blown me away. I'm afraid I don't know who Kristin is but this is one hell of a tribute, I am even going to pay for extra applauses for this. Well done Amera. Val
- Amera
  March 22, 2007
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  Val
  Thanks, this is the first time I have tried this form.
JohnnyD
March 22, 2007

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An interesting and beautiful piece. So is Kristin's picture. Unusual eyes, pretty, but with a message. I am cognizant of that message from prior experiences but it escapes me at the moment, but it will not forever. yeah, i like this form as well, very cool.

That was a sweet tribute to Kristin, how is she feeling??

Here, a rose for both of you.

dad
PerVirtuous
March 22, 2007

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I Bow, Kneel, Supplicate, and Courtsey!
You have tickled me with this one. I want to tell you how I see the words painting a beautiful picture. The background is fantastic! It is the best Trois-par-Huor I have ever seen! You are the cat's meow! Three bunnies for you, my love.
- Amera
  March 22, 2007
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  Trois-par-Huor??? You crack me up. Love ya.