rake apart my scalp and lay me bare,
there,
between the hollows and the screams;
dreams upswept sleeping here.
hair and skin and teeth and bone,
bound as brittle powder, blown
across a scattered, wayward wind.
Please tell me what you think
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Screaming, is what first enveloped my senses... I was overwhelmed with the sensation of someone screaming, and sensing the throes of ones death, even or all be it, mental. write on!
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Powerful, poignant and definitely felt some intense emotions pulling through...
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What a talent!
From one Stephanie to another this is awesome poetry. One of the best I've read. It feels really raw which only adds to it. Brilliant! Stephy x
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Stripped!
I'm a big fan of the short forms and this is a great one. Very stark image.
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Oh...beautiful sunshine girl
Keep going, keep going
Sadness my ass
I though it was beautiful
Almost as beautiful as you
"Wayward Wind"
Did you lose you soul in the "wayward wind" ?
Or simply your love
Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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anguish and sorrow pour from each line
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Sadwrite with pain
you write of deep feelings of anguish, and sadness. i thank you for writing and hope this day or time will pass. Few folks understand when you get inside that `funk`. I thank you for shariong.
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:-)
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Claude likes!
Your writing is strong, dear.
-Annie Claude
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A very strong image, simple but very powerful. I like your piece.
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i think this poem is very good
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wow...that's...shocking. Not quite what I expected, but strong.
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Power, classic style, I wish there was another verse, the rhythm is so fantastic.
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Thanks.
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ahhhhhhhh I dont think Ive read anything able to describe that feeling quite as well as this.
good to see some words from you again.
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Long awaited words from Ms. Sunshine. This is stark and cold, like a wind swept hill barren of the faintest growth. There's a longing here that calls out of its own accord. Even the wind is wayward...
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"between the hollows and the screams;
dreams upswept sleeping here."
I love those two lines. Awesome job. it was sad, but I liked it. Keep up the writing.
love always and forever, midnite rae
aka:marissa rae
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