you were way too late
I couldn’t pretend anymore
that it was just traffic
men went on foot
with thermal cameras
searching for you
they pointed
their cameras
at the cave where you
had been
camping
and you were a block of deep blue
Author notes
I like the idea of thermal camera and death, not sure if this is the best way to put this idea into action.
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hmm i like it but i think im a little confused. 'a block of deep blue' ? like frozen?
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Yes, exactly! Thermal cameras show heat. Red/orange/etc. is hot, blue is cold.
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I like the idea but i think you could've gone deeper making it more eeeire as you went on
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