The only certainty,
besides expiration,
is natural decay.
Our bodies are rotting,
like fallen crab apples
that litter dying grass.
Like cars that rust away,
so to our exterior
is becoming the past.
But do we really age?
Are we millions of cells,
a composite being,
that will rot in and out?
Are we just our organs,
computers that pump blood
and create new seedlings?
Are we just like planets,
living only because,
in realistic sense,
our space is occupied
by other living things?
Though it is uncertain,
life is more than nothing,
and decay is for shells,
not for the life inside.
Author notes
Rootless
A contest entry
- Age by flight.
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This is a very interesting poem. I like your thoughts on age and decay and all. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I love corruption.
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Very well done. I often feel we are rotting from the inside out as time takes it's toll. But lucky for u we are more than our bodies, we are a soul and that soul, if nurtured is growing with bounds of love each day. Great poem.
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Very thought provoking...the famous question, "Why are we here", I like this poem...nice to read what someone else thinks of life and why we are here...decay, well I don't like that reason...but it fits well with the poem..thanks for sharing
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this had a great descriptive detail to it that I find lacking in many (mine) poems. I appreciate your articulation and word choice.
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Very Nice
This was great, I have many times wondered what my purpose in life was and I am sure many upon many of others have as well. Great job on this piece!
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What a wonderful way to describe growing old at least that is what I got out of this poem thank you for sharing this piece it was very well done.
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hmm
Are we just our organs,
computers that pump blood
and create new seedlings?
I like this the most. Becaus it's an age old question. (wel not excacultly I mean computers arent that old yet) But it does raise the cuestion: What are we doing here and what i our perpose in life.
I think these are some well written thoughts.
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Well written
I like it, the fact that you face aging for what it is, a stepping stone in life, not something to hold you back from life. Excellent read. Good Job -
WOW
Very well done. This is a piece that make you stop and think about life and how it will end. Awesome! I like it.
. Rewarded 4
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Actually, sometimes the inside can decay while the exterior seems more fit than ever before...the electric processes can be subject to all kinds of odd influences that can lead to disjointing and disaffection. To me, those changes can be far worse than those that are outward. Good poem, though. Be blessed.
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wow this really makes a person think. Great job. Great images. Great piece.
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nice wonderings
this really made me think, it was very vivid with a definite and effective tinge of melancholia
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This is very wise and gave me alot to think about.
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Wow that is so vey descriptive,and very intriguing, such a nice choice of words put together so well.
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i love it. It's very descriptive, and very interesting. Keep up the great write!
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this is very good, excellent, you deserve a gold star,, well done
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Great.
Good descriptions and awesome choice of words. Great write.
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33 -
A very artistic and exciting contemplation of aging. I love the metaphors you give to aging, kinda creepy. Then at the end you conclude that aging doesn't effect the soul and that we are more than the sum of our parts. Quite philosophic contemplation of life! Reminds me of the modern poets whose books I get from the library, and yet it has this interesting fresh and real quality I don't find there, it has emotion behind its philosiphy, which not many philosophic poems have. Excellent, truly deserving of winning the contest! Good luck with that.
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