“Boring damned people. All over the earth. Propagating more boring damned people. What a horror show. The earth swarmed with them.” -Charles Bukowski
Have another pink martini
Watch another rap video
Close your eyes and you’re twenty years older
contemplating scalpels and needles
to buy back your youth
With leftover smiles around my eyes
and yesterday’s frowns between them
I’ve words of wisdom to share
But none for you
giving you advice
is like flushing diamonds down the toilet
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Love love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is the way to think.
Bravo.
I can't even start explaining how much I aggree with you.
For me it is like a thought I might have in the future.
For I'm not yet full of wisdom.
Nice of you to give me a head start!
With leftover smiles around my eyes
and yesterday’s frowns between them
I’ve words of wisdom to share
If this doesn't state that becoming older is becoming wiser and there is nothing more hounorable than that. You can slap me!
Thanks for putting this on ap so I could read it!
Love & peace
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Intersting write great but alson mind boggling; your veiw on society today is absolutly correct but the fct that you acua;;y wrte it is iteresting. it opens my eyes great write.
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I love it
Its true what you say, though I am young I see what you mean. So many people do not care to listen to those who know, to understand and love thier life. they try to always be changing themselves instead of stopping and feeling and being happy with who they are in the moment. Really, I love it.
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Damn. This is great, it's such a good commentary on today's society.
Too many people are stuck in the world of shallowness with all the plastic surgery and the drinking and all of that.
I like the twist at the end with the "I've words of wisdom to share... but none for you". I just kinda laughed at that, it's really in-your-face ish.
The last two lines are really good. I like the analogy a lot.
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I'd flush them.
but then I don't like them anyway. I will be one to grow old happily if not gracefully (sometimes I trip on nothing) They say youth is squandered on the young but only if they are brought up by the TV and nothing more. Boring indeed little tiny carbon copies of the same old shit may as well be on re~feed.MY children are themselves and I encourage them to embrace what makes them different.They never bore but are quite the challenge to all who know them. Bravo hopefully parent will see and understand there by teaching their kids to be themselves no matter the cost. -
This is certainly an interesting poem. Re-capturing youth is as old as ... whoever was looking for the fountain. To each his own I say, although I would never do it myself.
I think being bored with people and life is much more dangerous...unless we have the surgery in another country
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A very interesting opionion you've portray in your poem, very nicley done, your wrods are put together so nicely.
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interesting take on this ever present subject matter. Everybody has an opinion. I am certain you will find that out as this poem continues to be read. I have to say that I found yours to be somewhat in line with my own. I am of the mindset that wisdom isn't ever wasted when given with insight. Just a little thought you might want to condsider...we aren't always supposed to give everyone we think could use our experience , our knowledge...if we listen carefully to our inner voice we will be given the green light when it is appropriate...peace and light, kp
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I'm working on narrative poetry. Using someone else's voice, not necessarily my own. Just writing the viewpoint of an older person looking at the things that young people waste their time on and value sort of. Thanks for the feedback.
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A person aging and trying to stay young is not a thing to be a shamed of, but a person wasting their life in their youth before they know what happened, then mid-life crisis is their only way to get back to what they want by any means possible is what Bukowski said: "boring damned people." I like how you centered the last 2 lines, where you give words of wisdom in a reproachful manner but separating it from the rest of the poem's alignment because you don't want to offer them good advice (but you are giving it to them nonetheless).
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i had to read it over to get the just of it, drug or drinking or something right? very good, i really like it!
--gooshawn <3 xoxo
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