Oh my love,
how I yearn for you
How I dream of you and your warm embrace
I think of you as I lay each night.
Your the first thing I want,
with the morning light.
I want you, I need you,
with out you I am spent.
You fill me up with your essence.
I know you are bad, not good for me.
Yet without you,
I feel my life not complete
I drink in your flavor,
your scent I remember.
Your sustaining presence
is what gets me through the day.
Do I need you - no
Do I want you - yes
I am not complete without your presence.
Everyone tells me you're not good for me.
In my heart I know this is so, so true.
But, I need you, I want you.
I am just so weak
I need you in the morning,
I need you all week.
Please - my wonderful love so true.
Please - my coffee, just help me get through.
© joyce Ingebritson
Author notes
The Doctors have told me not to drink coffee. If I must, only one cup. How rude! I love coffee.
I miss my coffee.
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A contest entry
- PROVE YOU'RE WORTHY OF MY POINTS by EmeraldDaze.
480 points, ended June 5, 2007, 60 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for entering my humble little contest
I am enjoying this one alot - I hope you had as much fun entering as I am reading all the different entries! I am really getting some good stuff this time around
I am LIVING this poem! Very good indeed
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I love coffee too. I drink it about three times a day, cold, slushed, hot or iced. lol I know exactly how you feel.
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem~ Keep up the good work~ Good luck to you in the contest!
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I LOVE IT! ! ! (Both the poem and coffee) I completely relate to your love of coffee, MMMMM. I'd only change one thing "Everyone tells me YOU'RE not good for me." I don't know what I'd do without my coffee. I love the twist you gave it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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This poem is so passionate, so beautiful, so full of wonderful emotions of love and wanting someone so bad.. I could really feel the desire... so full of love..
then the twist, hehehehe
well done, I just love that the poem turned out to be about coffee.. soooo funny
thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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this is really great! the twist at the end made me laugh out loud, i was reading through thinking it was about some long lost lost love, and then... pow; coffee! thank you very much for this great entry, and good luck in the contest
lucy
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Hahaha, I sympathise--I recite poetry to my coffee every morning, I'll have you know. XD
No, really, well done.
I don't know how I feel about stanzas 4 and 6--they don't add much if you ask me...
Other than that---I like the tone, and the humour in it generally--Refreshing approach, keep writing, and good luck.
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Haha, about halfway through I realized the background and what the real theme of the poem was about. This was a cleverly crafted poem, great write!
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Funny Poem!!!!
Congratulations on winning the Bronze. It was a joy to read and made me smile at the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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Dear poet, how I enjoyed this poem! I thought it was going to be a typical 'oh I miss you' poem but you proved me wrong!! This is the only poem entered that has made me laugh. A very well done to you! xxx
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coffee! nice background it goes with the piece perfectly! yes coffee is good! I understand why you miss it Im sure you and coffee will be together again soon anyway that was really funny and kind of sad in a way you know? great job and good luck in my contest!!!
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Dear poet, sorry I haven't commented yet. I have been waiting for the contest to close before judging. You will hear from me soon on how you've done. Thank you for entering! xxx
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haha! I love it! While I was reading the first few lines, I was actually kinda wondering "what the hell is up with this coffee background?" haha! Classic and original! I love it!
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lol a lot loving this one. great poem joyce. My love for coffee! I can relate!!!!!!!! Yes I can. As always you intertain me with your poetry.
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Your poem is a finalist!! Good Luck
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TRUER WORDS WERE NEVER SPOKEN. I know how you feel but my addiction is chocolate. Isn't it strange how the best things in life are bad for us. But I am not a drinker of the java so I am not familiar with that problem. I can't resist CHOCOLATE and I love it so much. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
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Well I don't know, I like chocolate a lot too. But there is nothing better than a good cup o coffee.
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lololol! what a wonderful twist, sis I love it!
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