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devouring elements

I saw a rainbow in a fire.
one can encompass the earth,
the other, destroy it.
simple harmony.
nature allowing two of it's elements
to join in perfect balance.
each one controlled
by the same substance-
the nectar of the earth.
enabling one to exist
causing the other to vanish.
the force of creation was depleted
for one instant.
these could not possibly exist
together
without some kind of energy
entailing a cosmic bond.
so look to the cosmos
oh ye people of freedom
and define harmony
if you can.
if law and order were to
actually exist
this unification would not.
therefore we are correct in thinking
that things aren't quite what they
are meant to be.
what to do.
define ourselves as equals.
invite fire and flow
to sup at one table
and join them there
in one accord.
blindly.
then look to ourselves
and ignite the soul with a fire
encompass the heart with a rainbow
and declare all people 
worthy of

equality. 

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  • The chaos is what brings forth balance. Order is only achieved through the natural dissaray of everything. You show the balance of things with out actually showing the balance of things in this poem. It is a chaos answer to my prompt and in that way expresses it perfectly. Good luck in the contest.


  • individuality gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    law and order is a myth - something to soothe us, small humanity. we live in a chaotic universe, we are the grains of madness


  • six of diamonds
    June 21, 2007
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    nice, you have the knack for making interesting and unusual pairings.


  • drkmisery1
    March 26, 2007

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    very nice write... i liked the representation of humans as elements that are combined so that they make a harmonious scene... very very nice write

    nature allowing two of it's elements
    to join in perfect balance.
    each one controlled
    by the same substance-
    the nectar of the earth.
    enabling one to exist
    causing the other to vanish.

    this was probably my favorite section... good luck in the contest and good luck in all of your future writes