Today is the last day
When I'm seeing the sun ray
I know I've to go away
I wanna say
Everything to you
And pray to heavens
That after my departure
He gives you the power to endure.
I would like to apologize
For every single reason
When I hurt your emotion.
I would like to erase
Every single memory
Of mine
For I know they'll make you cry.
When I'm going far
And I know after this final departure
I'll be never near
I'd like to bring someone nearer
To you my love.
For I know you can't bear
This loneliness ever.
And I'll go with the pleasure
That whenever
I'll see you from heavens
I'll not find you lonely.
A contest entry
- ~~If you knew today was your last day on earth how would you spend it?~~ by Sweetangelgrace.
475 points, ended April 5, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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WOW! this was an amazing read! very nice!
would like to erase
Every single memory
Of mine
For I know they'll make you cry.
these were very depressing words!!! Your piece is very beautifully penned and congrats in winning a bronze for the contest! u deserved it!
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4 Stars ****
Good eve/noon/morn there.
When I read the title, the first thing that struck me was the song "When I'm Gone" by Eminem.
...and after I read the poem, my first reaction was "
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Is it a personal write, or just made for a contest, or both?
Thing is, the love you bear for the loved ones, for the dear ones, truely inspiring. But at times, loneliness is necessity to realize a person's value in life. Solitude for too long, on the other hand, can be depressing. I do too, hope that when you look from above, you find not any of the people you love, alone.
Take cares and have a nice time. Just keep it up. Your humble little friend - Vic ( who else? ) -
Brilliant work! You're so talented!
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Very good write poet you paint a picture that I can see in my head and that great.
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what a terribly sweet and heartfelt poem. i thoroughly enjoyed this write.
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I am awfully glad that you enjoyed it.thanks for reading and commenting.
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lovely write ..feel emotion and tenderness .. a lovely goodbye
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Thanks a lot for taking the pain to read my piece and feeling it.
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Tops!
Sweetest essence on earth, this, the caring nature of someone over others, such care and attention to scenery in this that is so eloquently said in lowly cascades, the vibrancy of a whisper is more forceful that out loud, this is meant to read like a prayer. Lovely work indeed.
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Thanks a lot for so much appreciation. I am really glad that you felt the depth of my poem.
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oh!what ever may be your aim, it makes me sad. You used the words final departure, may make emotional impact..but makes me very very sad.I never expected my dear sister to plunge everything into darkness for those of us live to see. She must be a beacon light for all of us to cross the ocean..pardon me If I have misread the poem..only afection over powered me.
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this spiritual poem from u makes me think, will the love poet become spiritual??
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Dear Poet,
I loved this poem, the feel and tone were wonderful. It made me feel the emotion you might have had when writing it.This was an amazing... the title pulls you right in and it was very worth the read.
I couldn't have said it better myself. Great job and the best of luck to future poems...
Thanks for entering!
~~GRACE~~
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