Sweet Daffodils
Saffron trumpets herald nature’s yawning
budding shoots percepting vernal dawning,
rousing notes alerting souls in slumber
re-awake from nature’s rhythmic cumber.
Undulating fields of gold cascading
brightening the earth from winter’s fading
fair daffodils call forth new revival
greeting each fresh voice on its arrival.
Alas, approaches soon the hasting day
though Midas touched each bloom must fade away
to rest in peace whilst earth becomes aware
of other miracles in nature’s care.
Sweet daffodils you leave us oh so soon
adieu, the choir that sings the sweetest tune.
Author notes
I am a rule reader
A contest entry
- In Honor of Spring [CONTEST] by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended March 29, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - No More Typecasting by unt1tled.
600 points, ended June 5, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Battle of the Bronze by th3sl4y3r.
580 points, ended June 14, 2007, 107 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very beautiful about daffodils. Daffodils are happy when the wind makes them sway and dance.
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This is a beautiful poem about daffodils. Your rhymed this well and it flows nicely. I really like daffodils.
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This is so beauitful out-standing poem. Check my daffodils haiku out. Thanks for sharing your poem to us. You are so talented. I hope you keep writing.
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beautifully stated. i would like to congratulate you on the bronze in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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I love daffodils and I love this poem. Wonderful, wonderful work
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Absolutely 'spot on' descriptions of Spring. Congrats on the bronze!
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Sweet daffodils... I can see the imagery of your words perfectly. They create such a picturesque scene. Lovely and vibrant words! Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
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Ah, the smell of spring time poetry is in the air. To bad we aren't all so inspired by all this cleansing to attack the problems we face as a society with renewed vigor and prudence.
Your write was as flowing as it was telling. Thanks for promoting this.
Best wishes on your future works.
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very nice!
beautiful. These are my favorite flowers! I thought you wrote a great poem describing springs awakening. thank you for sharing.
Sweet daffodils you leave us oh so soon
adieu, the choir that sings the sweetest tune.
these were my favorite lines.
peace and light always in all ways, kp
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GORGEOUS!
I love this one: rhyming sceme; imagery; they bloom before my eyes in inspired, inspiring verse! Good luck in the contest: I think this is DA WINNA!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
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Hi, I could not wish for a more lovely poem to read just before I go to bed, a very lovely write my friend, I hope this brings you home a gold shiny dust collecter,night night, hugs Di
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Beautiful beautiful write, I love seeing the daffs come out, I love knowing its springtime and you have made that come across so well. I could not have said it better myself!!
WELL DONE and good luck with the contest.
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Wow you uses such beautiful words, such nice imagery. You made it come to life so well, very nicely done.
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it is sad for me, but i don't think i have ever seen a field like that, i mean, it is something i kind of always wanted to experince, you did a great job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Your vocabulary here is astounding. Great job! Wonderful visionary skills! I love how it just comes to life. It really rouses my senses!
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What a wonderful poem.
I can close my eyes and imagine
" fields of gold cascading
brightening the earth from winter’s fading "
Great rhyming and sentence structure.
Flows very nicely.
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Beautiful
This is beautiful my friend, (I feel jealous) just kidding but I do wish you the best in this challenge. I guess I finally found the poem. Thanks for sharing it with me...
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