Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

War

We pine for peace partaken
But our country loves distress
Instead we have war infinite
Causing our world's sad demise
Because we have wrought agony

Author notes

peaceandpenguins

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • crimsonfury
    March 24, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    "Peace partaken" was a good combination, it seemed to have a nice rhythm to it. Your third line was a bit awkward to me...the word "infinite" just didn't quite fit properly, or so I thought.

    I like the message in your poem. It's true.

    Thankyou for entering.