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Street Life

 

 

 

We explore the streets, she and I
where the strange ones never go
riding the no. 66 bus
past the ruined meat market
up and up to the small café
(now in its third incarnation)
where I pick up the pasteis de nata
from time to time, usually on Fridays

On and on , to Little Brazil
and
'los bessos'
where once we talked all night
drinking Mezcal , sipping like sissies
nodding coyly to aging gaúchos
in their sweat-stained cowboy hats
uncouth and uncompromising -
strutting like barnyard chickens
to vulgar-worded songs
and new rounds of salacious laughter

We wandered, stumbled
playing games without conscience
past  dimly-lit shacks -
as the ghosts of quarter-pound staggered flats
issue forth from
long-dead worshiped Stratocasters -
and the sarapi draped around us
like a map of the world

Now

on this sultry New York night

                       dust beckons
sucking out implications
and stenciling graffiti
on our dirt-clod minds -
murals of telephone wires
tiny birds, bright kites
and a placid, curly head on a floral pillowcase -
while scrawled upon the sleeper's chest,

                                             this text:

"Only in dreams

           is my memory restored...”










Street Life
©crisstiena
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Author notes

 

pasteis de nata – crème pastries
'los bessos'  - ‘the park of the kisses’
Mezcal – Spanish alcoholic drink similar to Tequila
Gauchos – Spanish cowboys
Sarapi – traditional Spanish weaving with lots of colours
Quarter-pound staggered flat - fat punchy sound of an acoustic guitar

Original word bank:
01 barnyard chickens
02 Brazil
03 cafe
04 sarapi
05 stenciling
06 meat market
07 quarter- pound
08 cowboy hat
09 dirt clod
10 dusk

Image>Brazilian artist Priscilla Santos

City of choice> NEW YORK

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  • Criminy... the number of contenders for Gold is burgeoning, this poem no exception!

  • pvenugopal
    August 4, 2007

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    Excellent poem. Its tone and inflections reminded me of Eliot... Great craftsmanship with the use of the word bank you had to draw from. A pleasure to have read this poem. Congrats for the trophy.


  • zt
    July 23, 2007

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    A very cool poem. You did an excellent job with the word bank you were given. Your story was well told and quite vivid. It was as if you had been there. Congratulations on the win! It was much deserved...


  • poetryality silver member
    March 28, 2007

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    Criss,

    I have read this poem three times and with each adventure I find, yet another reason to read it once more. Everything about this work is GOLD worthy.

    "now dusk beckons
    sucking out implications
    and stenciling graffiti
    on our dirt-clod minds -"


    These lines remind me of how adventurous I was a few years past. I need to play in this playground again soon, just to refresh my youthful (adult) spirit. This poem sings. It makes me miss the children I worked with at Boys & Girls Clubs here. They were Brazilian, Hispanic, and Dominican. We raised a ruckus most days. I love their community, filled with laughter and so high strung. Brilliant work!

    Congratulations! You worked this girl and surely deserved the honor. It's been my high esteem to ride the rail with you.


    Blessings & Love &hearts'

    Renee


  • Heartless Angel
    March 26, 2007
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    Wow. Wow.Wow. This is such a cool poem. I love the way you describe this culture (although what culture it is is unclear) I like the encorperation of foreign language. This is an original, interesting piece. Keep up the stunning work.

  • marrow
    March 26, 2007

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    and the sarapi draped around us
    like a map of the world

    i love the way in which you used that word. purely brilliant use of it.

    you've been the most consistent all throughout this competition, so i'm not surprised at all that you are still in it. you're brilliant.

    j

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    March 22, 2007
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    Excellent piece. I love when word banks flow so smoothly.


  • Regenhart
    March 22, 2007
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    nice poem
    It paints the true Brasil very well
    Good luck in the contest!!
    Tchau,


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    "as the ghosts of quarter-pound staggered flats
    issue forth from
    long-dead worshiped Stratocasters -
    and the sarapi draped around us
    like a map of the world"

    Sighhh...You are such an incredibly intelligent & thoughtful writer, my dear Friend...I could inhale the scent of coffee, hear the noise of the streets...Brilliant stuff, Sweetie...Good luck in your challenge...Impressive stuff, Lady... Wanda

  • Rowan gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    Wow..I never would have guessed this was a word bank, very clever, and what a wonderful journey you've granted the reader, loved this. S2 was jaw dropping. And the ending quote, was perfect. Amazing.

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