As midnight reflects
upon itching waves,
breaths of marbled
cobalt turn blushed.
And the gummy quills,
(raven as the pupil)
gently tease the sea
to rest.
Butterfly smooches
tickle the scene.
As moments carry
the moons beneath
sleepy jackets,
to await tenderly
for the yawn of
embroidered lashes,
and the utter of
sunny skies.
Author notes
Didn't know what to title it, sorry
I'll have a think.
In a list
A contest entry
- "Oh, your eyes- a hackneyed blue. Is your soul cliche too?" by deadcolor dreams.
600 points, ended March 28, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There is such a gentle and dare I say sensual atmosphere inside this poem
It definately speaks to the feelings of the reader and what a smart alliteration you have there again
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I really love the imagery. "embroidered eyelashes" < double whammy with the alliteration. Great job, and good luck! Definately unique!
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Wow such vivd imagry you portray, so lovely. Th background goes so well with this lovly piece. Very nicely written.
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The first stanza makes me think of pink eye, because of the words "itching," "blushed," and "gummy." You might call it Conjunctiveitis
At the same time, it paints a very soft picture, really very lovely. -
wow, this is really good!!!!1 i really like it!!! Goood luck in the contest!!
--gooshawn <3 xoxo
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I love this poem! Great imagery! It paints a lovely picture in my mind and the background goes so perfectly with it; not distracting. Like surviver said, very calming. Great metephors! Hope you win the contest! Good Luck!
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i actually really like this poem. its kind of... i dont know...fresh! lol in a way and very calmin. nice one.
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Lol.
I wasn't sure how the title went with the poem. Anyways I love the poem. Give me real inspiration... now I must go write. Great job.
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33
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