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~ Empty Houses (Angola or America) ~

By No Means "A Knock" on U.S.

but "An Eye Opener" from outside of US 

 

Sightseeing poverty from sheer Desolation
Children half clothed and bare foot in the Streets
Roadside umbrellas as vendors Struggle
Just truly to make their families ends Meet


Boulder washed clothing within stagnant Ponds
While the children of tomorrow swim Nearby
The Hustle and Bustle of their daily dirt Paths
But this is not the survival tactic of this Tribe

Potholed shelters with roofless Domes
Shanty housevilles full of abandoned Homes
Open trench sewers encircle their Life
And yet still eyes wide open and full of Life

On their earthen walk-ways, same clothes - seven Days

Still no budget battles over who's asphalt nor who's Gravel
Here still! As their songs sing fully for everyone to Hear

For still they recognize at least they have a path to Travel

As tourists come and go giving Angola's eyepiece a quick Visual
But tourists glasses only seem to see from the perspective of Empty
With every cable christian channel channeling all their millions of Channels
Because they placed zoom lens on what they perceived as profitable Poverty

But I am here within their house and my front door view is Now
As I stride-in-stride, these same Angolan dirt Roads
And all I see are many greetings with kind words and Smiles
Since America's so enriched, why is it we don't do the same back at Home

Heartfelt Hellos with no first or second Thoughts
Where revolution has scarred lands but Angolan hearts Not
So welcome to Angola, where poverty maybe True
But truly a land based on its' people and not what you’ve Got

 

Holding royal heads up high, It's their neighborhood...They Stride!
Upon their earthen bare corridors with backs materialistically Free
Enriched by the richness of warmth held deep within their Hearts
In comparison we are the ones resembling destitute Poverty

Angola’s previous wars marred, leaving what we consider insufferable Scars
But at least their present actions are healing their bloodletting Past
While we in America inturn, refuse listen to our past or Learn
And only try to do our best in the future to kick each other’s Ass

So America the Beautiful, America of Crime
America of Murders, America only out for Mine
America of the Fast, America of the Cash
America of the Care-less and quick to tell others to Kiss their Ass

America of the Me, America of Fuck “We”
America of Material Gain, No more American Communities
America of choosing Sides, America of white Lies
America! quick to live lavish, Times hard! Americans quick to Cry

So who can we say truly lives within these “Empty Houses “
When nothing at home we do wrong ever seems to be Learned
And just how truly empty are our American Shelters

Where today's motto is... “How to Get Over” and not “How to Earn”

So what have we americans truly gained, considering our wealth and material Gains

Should we have Capital Punishment for those who capitalize on others Suffering
Have we atoned for our past sins and truly gained knowledge for the next Generation

Or just gained another wrung towards creating the..."Next Generation Insane"

 

Now I’m not saying that it’s not rough and I believe we're just not up to Snuff
To make the call on how to live the life of an Angolan
But I believe they've found their worth with souls filled of pure "Hard-work"
A forgotten motto which we could surely model and re-learn from Them

Now you may scream and yell but I suggest you never try to Scale
And attempt to measure and place your house any Higher
Cause on a scale of 1 to 10 when compared to the spirit of an Angolan
America's present spirit would be gauged as nothing more than Liars

So when you look to place a measurement on who truly has that “Empty House”
Make sure you look well beyond front lawns to take your Toll
For the emptiest of the houses will belong to those that just looked Around
Instead of realizing they just had to look deep into their very own Souls......

 

So Whose Really Living In That "Empty House" Now?

 

Welcome To America's "Empty Houses"

Welcome To Angola...Only "Empty Houses"

Get It!

 

To Have It So Good Americans Sometimes We Are Just So Fucking Blind

To What's Really Important...

 

Peace!


Angola - Material Poverty Yes! Community Spirit Deprivation No!
America - Material Prosperity Yes! Community Spirit Enrichment - No!

So Who Truly Has The Emptiest Houses

 

Never a "Knock" just another "Head Knocker"


                  "Live From Angola, Africa"


To Understand, you probably just need to be Here, Open Your Eyes and

Take A Look For Yourself


Holla @ Ja Boi
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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 7, 2007
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    So glad someone on this site did not confuse Africa with South-Africa!

    Really sad that those poor kids have to live in such ruins. My heart bleeds and that is why I support the children foundations! Thank you for this tribute! I really appreciate this kind of poetry!!!

    Becks

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  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 20, 2007
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    This is a very strong piece of work says so much


  • SpydurPoet silver member
    October 20, 2007

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    Boom! And with a soft, but strong voice, he tells the tale of a world in desperation. You did a fantastic job with this. Had me covered in chills from beginning to end.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~
  • Hezi
    October 15, 2007

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    wow......i just want to say thank u for writing such a peice because we all need.....peace.....and love...keep helping people open there eyes....much love u beautiful creature

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    • xxprophet gold member
      October 16, 2007
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      Hezi

      Thank you very much Lady for the awesome and excellent response and feedback. It is greatly appreciated to see enjoyment from my writings. thank you again so very much

  • TXCowgirl
    October 11, 2007

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    You have expressed a rather unique take here on the subject at hand. Well written with good imagery and imagination. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
    ~TXCowgirl

  • SweetJane
    October 5, 2007

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    powerful

    This is a very eye-opening piece of work. It is an amazing read and I have to read more of your poetry. I just finished reading King Leopold's Ghost for history and wrote a ten page paper on it. I admit that from the beginning I have always been against the U.S. going into other countries and fighting wars, while neglecting the things that such an "all powerful" sort of seen as all powerful country could do for others. Such as helping other countries instead of hurting them.


    Although this piece hurts in ways, because there are so many in the United States who have risked their lives to speak out against crimes, torture, and have sought to change the government...we will never be silenced. As an American, I am a little upset about the statements that say that just because I live in America I'm spiritually deprived, but I understand there is a lot of hatred for America and those who are a part of it. I've lobbied congress, plan on voting for better presidents, and have always thought Peace was the most important for all human aspects of civilization. I think instead of making enemies of the people we should seek to change those who are accountable for the corruption in which we are seeing today.

    I beleive those who are truly accountable are those who are most led by greed and power, who lie, who led the farce on 911 and said that in Iraq there were nuclear weapons...and people were fooled for a time. I believe that all people deserve the same rights as others no matter what country they're from. Ignorance CAN become a crime, when those who are ignorant have power over those with knowledge.

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  • Midnight Lace
    September 29, 2007
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    The aura surrounding your poetry is so strong and powerful. The word choices are superb and fit the theme well. You have had my rapt attention from beginning to end, without waver. I did enjoy this. Thank you for sharing it here at Allpoetry.
    midnight lace

  • crystallynnbradford
    September 12, 2007
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    like it a lot, a bit long for my eyes but I like it
  • Timoteo8415
    September 2, 2007
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    I like it

    it is an excellent write, and makes a great point. I am an american and i agree with you 100%. Our nation is one of absolute greed, hate, and self centeredness. I know you don't mean this write as an american bashing, or maybe you do, but either way...why did you choose america?

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    • xxprophet gold member
      September 2, 2007
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      Thanks for the comment. I love America and my point was more to open eyes to our total materialism and in many caes lack of community when compared to the rest of the world. I travel a great deal and see the values which made us the power of the globe lost and rekindled within countries who have much less than us. What made us strong is being lost over placing much higher values on materials ansd money than people. that's my point of America today from what it used to be. Still i'm USA all the way. It's just our value structure is excuse my language (Fucked Up) these days.
      • Timoteo8415
        September 2, 2007
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        Thank you

        i would hope that you continue to send out the good word.

  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    August 19, 2007
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    Different and interesting piece you have here. This appears to me to be the kind of poem that means something significant to the writer, and we as readers are truly left with our own interpretation... and it's great I really like this piece of work and the way you have written it out here.
    ♥ Touchof1der

  • Purplemoondoll
    August 16, 2007

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    Very well written

    I ma not the biggest fan of poetry that doesnt rhyme but I did enjoy reading this very much. Excellent use of imagery and the piece flowed very well - kept me there to the end - well done

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  • Phed
    June 13, 2007

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    Wonderful

    It is such a pleasure to read a poem with some substance. the amount of rubbish on AP gets me down but every now and then i find a gem like this wonderful piece of social commentary! Well done!

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    • xxprophet gold member
      June 13, 2007
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      Thank you very very much for the gracious and positive feedback. I am back in Angola as I type here.

      I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and provide me such excellent feedback.
      Thank you so much again

  • Jeezus niece
    April 18, 2007

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    i see your heart and soul in this piece. you really took in your environment and made us all look at what we have or even dont have.i also see sincerity and i really enjoyed this poem. big ups on this one

    • xxprophet gold member
      April 19, 2007
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      Hey Lady

      Thank You for the comment. I've finaaly gone global and the inspirations are running with the wind. Hope alls going well and I'm doing what I do best Holding it down. Peace!

  • Know1
    April 14, 2007

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    So many great lines in this piece I hardly know where to start. So true that Americans often see nothing outside of our immediate vision. Not very many people have the strenghth of spirit to try to see things from someone elses perspective. BTW Raviyn is here with me and wants me to tell you that she thinks lines 30 - 38 are awesome because it really explains the attitude of the people themselves.
    All in all a great perspective on things.

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    • xxprophet gold member
      April 15, 2007
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      Know1

      Thanks for the comments. I very much appreciate your taking the time and connecting. Outside perspectives seem to all bring everything into perspective and as for

      the RAVIYN

      What's up lady. How are you?? Keeping that head up high I hope. Me I doing good, Finally gone globale and Woww! next stop Italy. My next poem's working title is the
      "Backpack Revolution" a worldwide evolution.
      What ja think. Anyway Keep going forward and never step back. and in closing Thanks so much for cjecking my poem out and I have got to run.
  • Yvette Champ
    April 6, 2007

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    An intense,thought provoking piece,the allusion to the empty houses in one country being emptied of that which enriches the soul and the empty houses in the other country empty of possesions.The great thing about the liberty of free speech and the creativity of poetry is that the poet may choose to voice concerns with care and share emotions and hopefully peacefully effect more understanding for all of mankind.Peace from across the pond

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    • xxprophet gold member
      April 9, 2007
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      Thank you very much for connecting, reading and giving me back this positive feedback. I truly appreciate that you enjoyed my writing here and appreciate your taking the time to read and connect with me from this perspective. Thank you so very much again.

  • B Tha Revolution
    April 6, 2007

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    So true! Somedays I feel bad for being an american. I can't say I am innocent of not taking for granted for what I have. But I Believe in the hope the bible teaches about the world being a paradise and all bad things will pass away.

    • xxprophet gold member
      April 9, 2007
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      I apprecaite your taking the time to read my work and respond. i truly appreciate this excellent feedback and your connectoing to my writing makes it worthwhile. Thank you for this comment.

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    April 6, 2007

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    Well I am in Botswana, and its not Angola but I hae cried many tears since arriving and been angry, bitter and frustrated. Fine powerful penning and all over Africa children suffer, I held one as he died of aids in the orhpanage I volunteered at here last week, so unnecessary and the world refuses to see. Feel guilty now I am on the Okevango Delta or close by to start a safari to view the beauty

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    • xxprophet gold member
      April 9, 2007
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      Thank You very much for this comment to my writing. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read my work.

  • gullionmar
    March 24, 2007

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    very true we here in america take way to much for granted ,but even here we have poverty and hunger and the kids are paying the price all over the world great write

  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 23, 2007

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    Wow that was so full of emotions, very nicely done, the words oyu use are so powerful. Very nicely doen.

    • xxprophet gold member
      March 24, 2007
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      Thank You very much for your comment.
      Still refining and working this one.
      I appreciate your comments
      Thank you very much
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