she's coughing up sparkles
a fine fairy dust
her head hanging
dry heaving
and no one even realizes
she's dying for someone to help her
not take her cigarettes
when she isn't paying attention.
Author notes
A girl whose life is supposedly so glamorous is suffering and no one can even tell... that's not a story I've heard before. XD Cliche, but different for me, sorta.
Please tell me what you think
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All the lines here feels so intense, maybe it's a chliche story, but you've done a really good job portraying it! This is really good! I like how it sounds! Short, but powerful! Really good job! "she's dying for someone to help her"... nice!
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Aww thank you. =)
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WOOOOAH awesome first couple of lines. Pretty, pretty, pretty, pretty. I have much love for poems which discuss the lives underneath the lives we see. Shes glamourous, but shes in need, and no one cares. How rude are people? Ace poem, loved the imagery xxxx
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People are rude, aren't they? =)
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