I saw myself in a mirror as a child the girl in the mirrior is rocking back and forth looking at me moving her lips saying help me and as I look down because I know I can not help her and I turn and lookat her one last time but she got up and left.
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I will help you always
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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A short but touching piece. good write, I can relate to this, and I still feel like a child sometimes, and dont want to be anything but. Thanks for sharing and take care XxX
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That's how I felt last week. I was certainly not who I thought I was.
Very emotional piece. hugs, Patricia 
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very emotionally deep. we need to let go of past things and look to the future. great job you did with this! keep writing. God bless you always
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Very touching and contagious. We all see a little the child in ourselves at one time or another. At some point in our lives we must let go and keep going. "When I was a child I behaved as a child, but now ... I put away childish things!" Such a true saying. In words of expression you captured the zest of this verse. A very good write. I suggest only to place a space between "look" and "at" 3rd. line. Other than that I like this poem and it's message much. -
Very good discription! Our child self grows up and we don't know where it went, I think you can move past it and concentrate on the adult you.
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This, to me sounds of a spiritual nature.
Visions seen, but they don't understand why they are trapped here. [Thats just my interpretation]
Very nicely written, and brought images flowing...
Well done...
Jeffro -
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Do not ever give up on yourself!! You are all you have. We comr into this world alone and go out of this world alone.. Unless you are escorted out by God's angels. In that case, you were escorted here by God' angels and in His hands forever. Seeing in the mirror is an illusion of you walking away from the real you. Just the opposite you are never going to do that because you are never alone fro beginning to end and beyond. Never give up on yourself, you know you better than anyone else. You are a rebel with a cause. A cause that leads to your Father in Heaven. He is the true light at the end of the tunnel and shows you the way. And you will know that it is Him! Your Grampa Don knows these things to be true and genuine. With you in spirit and in heart, Grampa
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interesting write. enjoyable but very interesting.. xShadx
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