On this dark silenced summers night,
the sun sets as she shines so bright.
On my heart full of memories of you,
as pain yet warmth does shines through.
Watching the mirrored view deep within the ocean,
sighting a vision of pure forgotten emotion.
Within the tide, calm yet rough, a lost memory,
returns from the deep within the waves esprit.
With the sun's beauty fading, as the day descends,
those memories hue, and across the view, transcends.
Love fills me as the moon arises, from the oceans edge,
your smiling face shines brightly upon the earths ledge.
Like your spirit the view creates a magical, nightly display,
my thoughts of you cause an explosion of lights, in an array.
Nature easing my grief, whilst eternally creating perfection,
the beauty of you in the skies, and in the oceans reflection.
A contest entry
- Amaze me by Sam-I-Am.
450 points, ended March 23, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sunsets Are Best {Shared}, Sunrises Are Best {Alone} by Death of the Author.
725 points, ended September 2, 2007, 46 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You really deserved the gold in the other contest - this was really good and I enjoyed reading it. The rhyme was really good, the flow wasn't quite so but other than that there is nothing at all wrong with it. Good luck and take care! xxxx
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Nice poem, thanks for entering, and good luck to you.
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i know that i'm here to read and comment, but to be true, i can say nothing but speechless.
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nice, you have a big amount of imagery here, and i like it, good luck and ty for entering the contest
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Wow,what a beautiful poem full of so much imagery,it truly is such a pretty poem...I am lost for words...keep it up you have a gift...
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nice
a very nice poem. deserving of praise -
i love it you have an awesome talent poet...i can see y you won the "Amaze me" contest thanx for entering and i wish you the best of luck.
-Cunningtrickster-
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Oh My God
This is so soft and beautiful I see why you won
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Very very beautiful.
This was quite moving, and very pretty.
Nice imagery!
-System of Cyanide
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congratulations on your new shiny trophy with this wonderful write
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THis is REALLY good.
I enjoyed this slot.
A very well done, and good luck
Midnight -
Aweomse
Great imagery and use of words. I love they way you express it all Awesoem job
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33 -
You have such an amazing way with words and I envy your ability to use these words to paint such a tuly wonderful picture in my mind. You inspire me to do better.
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