Hearing you one more time before we go,
lost down to our time, and its gotten slow
I wish it would slow down more so we could stay a bit longer
Maybe one more wish, one more kiss, another hug and I'll be stronger
The way you talk drives me insane,
lost in our tears so hard like rain,
leave me alone, now
crying out to the world.
The way you talk drives me insane,
lost in the years so short like days,
just hold me, now
crying out to the world.
Hearing you say 'Good bye' for the last time
no more reason to not ask you to be mine
I wish it would slow down more, so we could stay a bit longer
Maybe one more wish, one more kiss, another hug and I'll be stronger
The way you talk drives me insane,
lost in our tears so hard like rain,
leave me alone, now
crying out to the world.
The way you talk drives me insane,
lost in the years so short like days,
just you hold me now,
crying out into the world.
Author notes
Just something I did while thinking of some one really special.
A contest entry
- Rocket's Rocking Rounds by And Hyetal.
600 points, ended April 15, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Likely? Comments?
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I hate that piercing voice too. I wish they would just go into another room and close the door
Keep penning bud
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Alluringly Seductive.
This is yet again a stunning, mind paralyzing, emotion creating and drowning piece
! I LOVED IT! As I'm coming to find, I have loved everything of yours that I have read. This is so beautiful and I thank you so much for writing and even more for posting it.
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I like this one a lot!!!
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WOW!! wonderful write! i really like this! keep it up & good luck in the contest!
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Violent Serenity
Thank you so much I am glad you liked it!!!!
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Wow, wow, beautiful! No more to say; I'm speechless! Great work, thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!
Cassie
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rockerchkpoet
Heya thank you so much!!
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Okay, that baby on your author's picture is starting to freak me out...
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Hearing you one more time before we go,
lost down to our time, and its gotten slow
I wish it would slow down more so we could stay a bit longer
Maybe one more wish, one more kiss, another hug and I'll be stronger
i love this so much. i am not even exagerating. this is an amazing piece, and one that i can relate to my life recently. this is amazing really amamzing. i love everyword. especially the first stanza that i pasted here, that is just, wow. seriously an amazing write. and yet again i have to break my rule of not applauiding a poem in a contest i am helping to judge but i have to applaud this, it would be wrong if i didnt. truly an amazing piece and my favourite so far. great work.
laura
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Morgana Raven
Woah woah WOAH!!?!
You're a JUDGE?!
Omg I actually impressed a judge I am so humbled!! ^___^ Thank you! Breaking a rule for me? Aww you're too cool! Wait your favorite? Now I am really humbled!
I'm hoping to make this into a song I'm glad some one likes it so far! thank you thank you thank YOU!
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haha thats alright. it was an awesome write anyhow. really it is ^-^ good luck. i am only one of the judges though, i just hope they like it also which they should otherwise they have no taste hehe but yeah, brilliant write
laura
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