Watching the clouds
The grass to my spine
I enjoyed the effects
Of a few glasses of wine
Admiring the sky
For her mesmeric grace
I reached up my arms
Longing for her airy embrace
She understood me
My lustful request
And she sailed down
Against my warm chest
Upon my lips she laid
A starlight twinkling
Of a gentle kiss
As she plucked a heart string
Her eyes, an abyss
Filled with wishing and want
The setting sun lingered there
And the stars still haunt
A fountain of a color
Violet indigo blue green yellow orange red
Flowed in ocean waves
From her azure head
She undressed me
With a delicate care
I relieved her of a smokescreen cloud
Letting it float off in the air
Her nipples bright stars
A shimmer, a glint
Gave her bosom’s chroma
A fading tint
Down lower
Between early morning thighs
The breaking dawn;
A new day’s sunrise
She spread her legs
My sky was clear
I ventured, like the first pilot
Into her troposphere
Author notes
Sometimes it's nice to write erotica
When you're not the least bit aroused
J. M. Kaufthile
im dead - go away
A contest entry
- For Oboebaybee's faves only! by in-the-twilight.
600 points, ended April 1, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a very well written piece. I am not usually an erotica fan, but I like your work. You did a very good job at this one.....
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Well.
I think you did a fine job with this erotica, while I am not adept at writing erotica, I still like to read artfully done erotica. I think you qualify for a tasteful piece. -
Heh... I think you might have tortured the metaphor here somewhat... but not to worry, it deserved it. I really can't say this writing is bad... you taken an idea and shown it in an alternate light, which is so much the point of poetry. Good promo.
Best wishes on your future works.
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nice
it is very sensual it is very descriptive and has a lot of detail i loved the entire poem
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That was a very sensual poem so full of vvid images and lovley words, nicely written.
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this is a very sensual poem and it makes me want to watch the sunrise now...
lol great write nice imagery and descriptive!
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this was awesome. I loved it. I thought it was very tastefully done.
She understood me
My lustful request
And she sailed down
Against my warm chest
Upon my lips she laid
A starlight twinkling
Of a gentle kiss
As she plucked a heart string
Her eyes, an abyss
this was my favorite part. thank you for sharing. peace...kp
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oooh i love it
that's some sexy sunrise! gawd this poem was just amazing, i don't know how else to say it! other than good job!
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WOW! Deliscious choice of words! This poem reminds me of a poem I read a while back by e.e. cummings. Nicely done and very erotic. I cant get over the words...
Between early morning thighs
The breaking dawn;
A new day’s sunrise
She spread her legs
My sky was clear
I ventured, like the first pilot
Into her troposphere
Incredible! You started it off well, you ended it well, and the entire poem was done magnificantly! You are really good at this. Keep it up!!
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This is great... you're good at this kind of thing! Thanks for entering dear! Good luck to you! Rock on! oxox Meg
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