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Trip Down Memory Lane

A trip down memory lane
A revisit of the child I was
Blond hair, gray eyes, glasses and a big grin
Running, laughing, playing with her Mommy and Daddy
Carefree without a concern in the world
Thinking that life was great
It was....till that day in September in 1997
In a dead stop life took a curve
It was then when my Daddy died
There was no more Daddy and I
My hero died
Mommy and I carry on
The smiles and laughter start to return
We became best friends
Nothing could separate us
Or at least I thought...February 2000 came and went
Taking my Mommy away from me forever

The child that I was has ended

Taking these trips helps remind me of what I hold close to my heart

The love my Mommy and Daddy gave me

Something that can never be replace

I end this with tears in my eyes

Thank you for taking the trip with me this time

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    April 4, 2007

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    Thank you for entering

    This is sad. I know the way that you feel, I had a great dad until they got divorced and yeah... it's not the same, I know, but it's something I understand. Losing someone you love more then anything...

    Thank you for entering
    Faerie


  • Ale E
    March 23, 2007

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    I thought it was good. I wasn't so convinced at first but the ending just did it for me. It was touching. Full of great sad emotion. Nice.


  • Erik Ambrose gold member
    March 23, 2007

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    I'm going to be completely honest.

    At first I thought to myself, it's another poem about losing parents. Not detracting the profound effect it had on the authors life, or attempting to diminish the emotional substance. Just thinking, it's another one of the type. But when I reached the end, it didn't just leave me feeling sympathy; it left me saddened for the loss of people I never knew. I almost felt like it had affected me too. the last line is what did it. Excellent.


  • Spiritvision angel
    March 22, 2007
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    The memories we are blessed with or even at times we feel tormented by could be a gift indeed. To remember our parents as when we are children is usually a wonderful time. Thanks for this heartfelt write.

  • PalmettoSky
    March 22, 2007

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    ahhhh....very sweet and so sad...It can be a huge defining moment in a child's life when they lose a parent. I was 33 when My father died and I still reel from the effects of his passing. keep sharing your pain. stay in the light of love...surround yourself with people who love you...peace always in all ways....kp


  • A Murderous Lament
    March 22, 2007
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    Aw

    How sad. That is aweful to have that happen to a child. My now ex best friend lost both her parents to cancer within a year of each other. Her life was never the same. I empithize with you. Awesome poem though.

    A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33


  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 22, 2007

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    Wow that was so moving so emotional, such a very strong piece. Very nicely done, you made it flow so well.


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    March 22, 2007
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    This is a truly emotional write. I'm sorry for your loss. I've yet to experience the loss of my parents. But I've sustained other losses. Some cut just as deep. I can't imagine what it's going to be like when I loose mine. Kudos on a job well done with your expression of your grief.


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    What a wonderful piece full of emotion and how I know the feelings I lost my adopted mother and my real father all in the same year. Thank you for sharing this piece with us it was very well done..


  • broken.inside.xx
    March 22, 2007
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    wow...

    this is a very strong write.... to the point that it actually brought tears to my eyes, and nothing has done that in about 8 months... it was amazing...


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    March 21, 2007

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    This is beautiful and very sad. My dad hasnt been a dad to me in so long, it feels like he did die a long time ago. On february 17th my mother and my little brother died... so I kind of know how you feel. This poem really hit a soft spot. It was truely beautiful and I loved reading it. You did very well!!

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