The music coursing through my veins
it makes me feel alive.
Head banging in the moshpit,
I just hope that I survive.
The music coursing through my veins
it calms me to extremes.
Sitting at the opera
contemplating what life means.
The music coursing through my veins
it reminds me of who I am.
The calmness and the recklessness
like the waves that reach the land.
Serenity and mass destruction
with each flip of the dial.
This familiar world of make-believe
makes my life worthwhile.
Author notes
AngieMarie
A contest entry
- Truth of Life contest Round ONE by xandercheerios.
450 points, ended June 17, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - show me again by slipperssun.
800 points, ended October 26, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i too find music soothes the soul... fantastic piece thank you for the entry into my contest and i wish you well
cheers
jen
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Now this is more my style. Rhyming, and with an almost perfect rhythm (hard to get perfect), and a great flow (free verse poets think rhyming poems can't flow), I am impressed. I also love poems that try different styles, such as a repetitive line. I have a few poems kinda like that, and I love to see it in others. I hope you can continue this theme into the following rounds, you're for sure advancing.
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ah music, the rhythm of life, how sad a world it would be without the music coursing through us. all the highs and lows that come with it, sending us to smiles and frowns, a good poem.
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i love the order and the journey it takes you on lol...i know not JOURNEY but u know what i mean its like im here and then im there hahaha i love it!!!!
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I know how that feels the feeling that it bring
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This was a lovely piece that flowed well and the rhyme solid. Though I have to say that the repetition of the first line in the first three stanzas threw me. I personally don't care for repetition as I feel it tends to more often than not make the piece sound redundant in its expression. Over all this piece was lovely and enjoyable as well. Good Job!
Thanks for entering and good luck! -
Love it, love it, love it!!!! It really has a beautiful rythme to it, and the flow and rhyming are wonderful! The last stanza really makes it. Excellent Job!!!! Music to my ears
Wyatt xoxox
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