Raindrops of crystals fall from the sky
Glistening as they reflect off the water
Ocean waves beat against sand paper rocks
Swallowing grains of sand in a blur
The dense blanket of fog starts to clear
Weighted droplets turn into mist
The calming blue waters reflect like a mirror
Splaying ripples from drops each time it is kissed
The cool breeze carries a pleasant sweet scent
Memories forgotten now return in great strength
Realizing just how much time has been spent
Relishing freely as shadows shorten in length
The sun glints across as it rises with ease
Revealing the shimmer of the diamond filled ocean
Feathers sway gently through the light breeze
Waves crash peacefully in their swift motion
The sun slowly swims its way through the sky
Casting soft shadows that grow more and more
The silent fog sweeps in with a sigh
As droplets of crystals again fall to the shore
Author notes
ABC
A contest entry
- TEN CONTESTS In One, Something For Everone by earthstar.
600 points, ended April 3, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In Honor of Spring [CONTEST] by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended March 29, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I'm not really sure this speaks all that much about spring. For me, it would have to be quite a stretch. Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
A very calming poem. I feel like all you need is the right music and you could be whisked away into another place. This one is very captivating and your choice in words adds to the overall mood of the poem. Very serene very uplifting and very beautifully written. its like a picture in my mind. lovely write.
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Raindrops of crystals fall from the sky
Glistening as they reflect off the water
Ocean waves beat against sand paper rocks
Swallowing grains of sand in a blur
I love the intro really draws the reader into your work the imargery is very grand. Raindrops, glistening, made these lines very elegant.
The sun slowly swims its way through the sky
Casting soft shadows that grow more and more
The silent fog sweeps in with a sigh
As droplets of crystals again fall to the shore
How you tied crystals in the end had an impact very soft. One could alsmost missed the whole point by being so fee flowing, peace comes from you words. I had a really hard day it turn it all around.
Very well done thank you for entering my contest -
Yes indeed very soothing on a spiritual level and I love how you describe the evaporation cycle almost cryptically hidden amoungst the serenity of diction with this one. Very well done indeed and I hope the best for this worthy contender for the contest. *keeps fingers crossed for you*
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SPRING IN WINGS
with an azure back ground the poem is well crafted with utmost suitable words to express the desired meaning. spring is the king of seasons and is duly honoured in the verse -
Wowness
This is peaceful, nerve relaxing and what not? I loved the serene images, the lovely colors of nature.
Good luck!
~bad resln
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this was incredibly serene. I had such a calm feeling while reading it (then I finished and was snatched back into the chaos that is my life! lol) great job with this one. good luck with the contest. peace and light always in all ways, kp
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