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Dangling

 

 

i didn't see it coming.

 

    the noose, draped against my throat,

    like a rope of  pearls- a farewell gift,

    grating goodbyes & rugburn-

 

the noose of time.

 

    how i'd neglected knowing,

    truths tangled on the gallows of age-

    where someday I'd swing;

    away from rocking chairs

    & curling calico cats.

 

because fading fast,

in the coffin glow [of nevermores,]

I'd dangle

 

 

 

    to my death.

   

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 3
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    excellent.


  • DancingRed
    April 6, 2007

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    I love this one. It progresses very nicely to the ending. I love the line 'the noose of time.' Another gold for your collection, I see.

    DancingRed.


  • flight
    March 23, 2007
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    This almost made me cry.
    Honestly I have no critic for this.


  • purpledragonfly
    March 22, 2007

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    this was another .... write that makes me unable to comment correctly! You write like you are a professional and I'm reading out of a poetry magazine.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 21, 2007

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    this is scary because i have been there. no longer but to recall the thought is very eerie. i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 21, 2007
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    this is scary because i have been there. no longer but to recall the thought is very eerie. i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • kathy1967
    March 21, 2007

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    SPECTACULAR!!

    This is so SPECTACULAR!! I love every single line
    in this MASTERFULLY written piece of work!! Thank
    You and much luck to you.

  • Synful-symphony
    March 21, 2007
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    silly me forgot to applaud

  • Synful-symphony
    March 21, 2007

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    Wow, beautiful imagery, interesting concept. It is certainly an interesting way of thinking about death. "in the coffin glow [of nevermores,]" was by far one of my favorite images in poetry I have read. Beautiful and sad, lingering, dangling forvermore.

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