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Vernal Equinox

A balence of day, an equal night.
I am a fierce battle  
A victory of light.

Recognised, regarded
The whole world through.
A holy day, a birth,
A year begun a new.

Born the vernal
Passed is winter.
A season of stummbling footsteps
The bleat of life.

I who bare many names
Alban Eilir, Eostar, Eostre,
Festival of trees,

NawRuz, No Ruz, Ostara, Ostra
The rite of spring,
A day of Ladies, a virgin's Feast,

Failure of darkness.


Pagans knew of me, Prussia too
North to east, South to west,
Across the globe I am known best.

Author notes

I was researching about the vernal equinox and this sprang up from that.
All these different meanings caused by the 23.4 degree tilt of the Earth's axis.

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  • darkspiritonline
    April 19, 2007
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    wow.....that's a really good poem hun....oh...wait...I've already commented...but never mind...I'll comment again....because it's good, and you researched it....which shows dedication. ^_^

  • Touchof1der gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    It's funny that you mentioned doing a little research. I like the fact that you took that much interest and initiative. I too did the same before creating this contest and it all began with a newspaper article I had read earlier in the day... before I knew it, I was caught up. Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der
    • Silverlininng
      March 29, 2007
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      Thank you very much for holding the contest. It was a pleasure to write
  • Sitting
    March 25, 2007

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    Dear. Silverlinning
    You seem to have captured the essence what Spring is all about the old becoming new etc, i noticed that it wasn't a completr rhyme, but personally i don't think this matters.

    haha, i will say something nice now : i liked it a lot. I loved the way you structured it and the words that were used were extremely emotive (is the right word?)

    .if you don't win i will be coming after the person who is holdng the contest (i am joking)

    much love and respect,
    Sitting

    • Silverlininng
      March 25, 2007
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      Thank you buddy for the good comment lol and for the high opinion you have of my abilities lol

  • kjd
    March 23, 2007

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    Font a little light...

    ...(some of us older readers have bad eyes LOL), but after squinting, the poem warmed my old bones with the promise of Spring; well done!

    (((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
    • Silverlininng
      March 24, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting it's much appreciated and I shall alter the font too and make it a little darker and easier to read

      ~SL~

  • Epona
    March 22, 2007

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    lol i love the contrast you've got here between the poetic/spritual and the scientific. i like the 'bleat of life' line too- subtle hint at the usual traditional images of spring without allowing yourself to become cliched. the 1st person personification of the equinox works well cos you dont over do it- you allow the reader to acknowledge that its the 'event' talking without having to question too much how that would work
    great write- lovely way to use lots of prettiful words too
    E~


  • darkspiritonline
    March 21, 2007

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    very nice...^_^ Awesome!!!

    OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
    HHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Nice poem.....^_^ Pretty!!!

    My favourite parts were: "A balence of day, an equal night.
    I am a fierce battle --->Because you know my nature and
    A victory of light. ---> how I am. ^_^

    Recognised, regarded
    The whole world through.
    A holy day, a birth, ----> OOOH I like this bit a lot.
    A year to begin anew."

    I hope that this helps. ^_^


  • Findecano
    March 21, 2007

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    Nice..

    Nice Love it!
    Good write like it, doesn't all ryhme but hey...thats not too much of a big thing so yeah. Hugz...^_^

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