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Who Shot Who?!

 

 

 

 

the crime scene was taped
and tagged - with chalk dust
stuttering the story of the room,
in wandering lines and other
                  shapes with curve.

still life was poised in the edge
of waiting chisels; in the murmurs
of stone faced masons of truth -
who chipped away until a shape
                                        emerged ...

the victim ... laying beside
a spent, discarded, shell-casing -
wrapped in plastic care -
with fingerprints pointing in
                  ardent accusation.

men of firm resolve recoiled:
what horror! -
she'd "peaked" and called a halt

with him all still unsettled,
with his pistol there still primed!

he'd shot her an "I'm not finished yet" glance -
but she'd just smiled,
rolled over and
drifted away;

 

she was done ...

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cat gold member
    March 25, 2007
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    this is an angle no one else has taken- the body as found by a detective- very interesting that you were able to pull a poem out of it- took me through til the end to see what you would find-

    thanks so much for entering the contest

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  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 25, 2007

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    well ain't she a one eh'?? lolololol
    this has a subtle edge to it.. almost sarcastic too..

    many thanks for entering our contest and good luck

    G.x