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Terpsichore

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Dancing together gracefully
Enthralled by your charms totally
Softly, music so romancing
Gracefully, together dancing
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A stolen kiss in the dark
A musically created spark
Embracing your romantic bliss
In the dark a stolen kiss
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Music lifts me in your charms
Gently swaying in your arms
Two hearts as one in harmony
In your charms,  music lifts me

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I find comfort, in your embrace
Dressed for you, in my finest lace
With the music, our hearts entwined
In your embrace, comfort I find
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In your heart the music keep
Dreams of dancing in my sleep
So we shall never be apart
Keep the music in your heart

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Author notes

Swap Quatrain: each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3 must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent stanzas.
Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.
The Swap Quatrain was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.

 

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  • Artemis Gem
    May 22, 2007
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    interesting-I like the style.
    good description! keep it uP!

    pegleg


  • Swan song gold member
    May 20, 2007

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    This is wonderufl. As always you take the reader right along with you. So in fanstascy I glide along. But in reality I step on both of your feet. Wonderful poem.


  • Tercil gold member
    May 12, 2007

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    great performance

    The muse of astonomy is in very much spiralling fashion, an icon of movemnent and the heartbeat no doubt the motion to dance to, atronomical proportion in enlightenment.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    First time I have come across this poetry form - like the way yu have used this form for this entry in the contest - good rhythm and rhyme and flow to these lines. Has a steady beat to this poem that's contstant all the way through.


  • rain child
    April 4, 2007
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    The picture was amazing and the words flowed beautifully. Great write!


  • Casondra Vega
    April 4, 2007

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    Beautiful, reminds me of prom, if prom had gone better last year. Great job anyways!

    ♥ Kas

  • Life Messenger
    April 4, 2007

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    Nice

    A nice use of form and the swap fitted quite well in the poem. It has a nice flow to it. The words produce a gentle image which I can relate to, except for stealing a kiss part. Good job and keep on writing. If you are wondering...I like the last stanza the most. Cya!


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    April 4, 2007

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    I'm not a fan of rhyme myself, but you did it quite well.. so the flow was ok

    It was av ery sweet poem, and it felt very real, made me smile..

    Im crap at form poetry, so i take my hate off to you for that- not that i am wearing a hat though, it's only 6am!


  • LymphBeauty
    April 3, 2007

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    this was soooo cute, I loved.
    and I must try this quatrin thing sounds fun to write.

    can't wait to read more from you, ps ur display pic is real cute where did you get it?


    • Amera gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      LymphBeauty

      Thank you. I'm not sure wxactly where I got, I've had it for a long time. It came from the elfwood website.


  • Trial and Error
    April 3, 2007
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    Terpsichore...Greek demi-goddess the Muse of Song and Dance, correct?
    While not a fan of form poetry, I like this a lot Your rhyme's don't sound forced [except in lines 11/12, where the meter of rhyme is kinda off, but that's just my opinion].
    This is an interesting form. One I've never heard of before.
    Thanks for the enlightenment

    Kat


    • Amera gold member
      April 3, 2007
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      Trial and Error

      Very good, yes she is Greek; one of the sirens.


      • Trial and Error
        April 4, 2007

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        Terpsichore was the Greek muse of Song and Dance, the mother of the Sirens, however was not one herself.

  • melissa..
    April 3, 2007

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    wow, It took me to a ball room with a night of magic with my prince charming. I enjoyed this very much. Delightful. Please check out my work sometime and Id love to get your opinion or advice.. Thanks.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    April 3, 2007
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    Amera, totally, truthfully, romantically...Brilliant!


  • sans-amour
    April 3, 2007

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    I definately cannot write on such a strict form, but putting that aside, this is still a great poem with wonderful imagery, and a beautiful image affixed. I wish you the best of luck in the competition, Zach.


  • blueyez
    April 3, 2007

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    Here you go again you show off How are you so amazing and how was I lucky enough to find you? You outdo yourself every time! Perfectly played out!


  • tony yates silver member
    April 1, 2007
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    amazing

    very well written, thanks a million


  • clickclickBOOM
    March 28, 2007

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    I like your poem very much, and the structure is really cool. I've never heard of the swap quatrain. Also, Decemberists are amazing.


  • x CheepPurfume
    March 27, 2007

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    wowowo! My Goodness! This was incredible! First, I loved the picture. It was awesome, second and most importantly, this write was great! The flow was nothing but perfect! Wow. I really enjoyed this! Amazing job. Keep up the great work!

    Tori


  • Celticmoon
    March 26, 2007

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    First I have to thank you for introducing me to a form I have never had the pleasure of reading previously. Your words run smooth as silk throughout this piece. They wrap the reading in a blanket of comforting warmth that is not often found nor expressed so well.

    Bravo!


    Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Romily
    March 25, 2007
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    MARVELLOUS!


  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 22, 2007

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    Wow that was beautiful, the imagery was simply amazing. Even the music you chose goes with the poem so well. So full of passion. Just loved it!!!


  • Debbysmiles gold member
    March 21, 2007

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    Very nice piece, well done and creative. Very romantic and peaceful. YOu did a great job with the swap quatrain. Keep penning. Debby


  • Princess-Gloria
    March 21, 2007

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    Beautifully romantic ... I could hear
    the music playing in my mind. I love romance
    and this is excellent. Thank you for sharing
    Music lifts me in your charms
    Gently swaying in your arms
    Gloria


  • B Chandler
    March 21, 2007
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    one of my most likeable forms the swapped quatrain is. This was gracefully done keep penning


  • Muirghiel
    March 21, 2007
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    Clever, clever my dear. I hadn't heard of a Swap Quatrain before


  • Spiritvision angel
    March 21, 2007

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    Amazing write!!!! This is just great and romantic with flow that carrys the words easily.


  • And Hyetal
    March 21, 2007

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    Wow!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!! Great job!!!! Another form I have to try!

    Cassie


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 21, 2007

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    i have no clue how you were able to do this. i would make a complete mess of this and give you the utmost respect for doing this form perfectly. good luck in this contest and thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    March 21, 2007

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    I have never tried swap quatrains although I have sometimes inverted lines for the sake of giving them a different feel. I adore this poem for the feel-good imagery that it evokes. Dancing is one of my favorite activities (although I have grown too lazy over the years to do it much) and when I studied classical mythology, Terpsichore was a muse I gravitated toward (for me it was a three-way tie between her, Urania, and Euterpe.) I believe this is the first I have ever read of yours. The soft, intimate beauty that radiates from this poem will touch all your readers. I wish you well for the contest.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Never Fall in Love
    March 21, 2007

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    Wow
    Excellent job
    I haven't read much
    so I guess I'm missing all of this brilliancy
    sorry I couldn't catch up
    I have exams beginning
    and its really a lot of stress
    but damn
    this poem is amazing
    you have done a wonderful job
    as always
    keep it up

    Never ♥


  • PerVirtuous
    March 21, 2007

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    Bravo...

    Your words paint a stunning picture of love and abandonment... abandonment into the moment, the only place where power is found... and there you have captured all the power of the moment, and then turned the net you captured it with into words... upon reading these words, the net unravels and captures the hearts of those who read and understand.

    Vulnerability is power.

    Three bunnies for understanding this.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 21, 2007

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    aMERA,

    NOW THIS IS NICELY DONE! I'd
    have to practice on this style for a while myself and I am so swamped now its not even funny. Nice flow and message, liked the word usage and descriptions of emotions. very nice dear.



    Dad


  • Sacrificial Love
    March 21, 2007

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    Oh my...

    this is incredible... romance... eroticism... love... passion... so much in one piece... I LOVE IT!!!!!

    whew....

    xoxo
    Love you Sis...
    Heidi

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