Hand in hand, they walk slowly down the battered path.
Not knowing where they are going…just knowing they’re together.
The boy looks straight ahead, whilst the girl looks at him.
She doesn’t take her eyes off him, fearing he’ll disappear.
He doesn’t take his eyes off the path, fearing it’ll disappear.
Alas…she feels he doesn’t care, his eyes so focused on the path.
Her hand slowly slips from his, inch by inch until it’s free…
She stops walking and he continues down the battered path without her.
His eyes still so focused on the path…trying to find their way out of this maze.
Not feeling the tension and the weight in his hand is gone.
Something in his head tells him that he need to make sure she’s alright.
He looks down to find that she’s not with him, his hand is holding only air.
He turns around and looks for her, panic rising in his chest.
Looking all around, he finally sees her twenty feet down the path.
She’s sitting on the path, tears falling down her cheeks…
He walks back to her and kneels down beside her, wiping her tears away.
She looks up and sees that he realized she was gone and had come back.
“Why’d you let go?” He asks softly, gently stroking her cheek.
“I thought you didn’t care…” She replies unhappily, looking away.
He just chuckles and helps her to her feet.
“You silly girl, of course I care. I came back, didn’t I?”
She only nods, knowing that his eyes will become focused on the path again.
He frowns and lifts her chin gently.
“Why do you think I don’t care, honey?” She looks up to him
“You didn’t even look to see if I was okay…you only paid attention to the path”
He chuckles at her silliness and kisses her cheek.
“Don’t worry, honey, this time I’ll not let you out of my sight.”
She stands in his embrace, cold and numb.
Fearing that it’s just another stupid promise…
He takes hold of her hand, and they continue down the battered path.
Hand in hand, they walk slowly down the battered path.
Not knowing where they are going…just knowing they’re together.
The boy looks ahead and at her, whilst the girl looks at him.
She doesn’t take her eyes off him, fearing he’ll disappear.
He doesn’t take his eyes off the path and her, fearing they’ll both disappear….
Author notes
Just something cute-sy I thought of...
People seem to get confused by this poem. Every one tends to think it's about a "dating" relationship, but it really isn't...At the time, I was thinking of my older brother. We call each other endearing names and things like that cause we didn't grow up together, which makes our relationship more special that any others. Just and FYI.
A contest entry
- I want a family by RhiannonMari.
450 points, ended April 15, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - We want an AP family!!!!!!!!! :D by EmeraldDreams.
500 points, ended April 24, 2007, 12 entries
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I liked this. It shows an interesting take on a relationship between siblings. The flow was good, and I liked the simple wording you used, as it didn't detract from the meaning of the piece at all. Great write! Thankyou for the entry!
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Aww, thank you for the wonderful comment!
~Raine~
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Congrats on the silver in this contest for a very interesting write. Seems we will be sharing a new sister. Well done and keep up the great work. xxx
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Thanks much! ^_^ Congrats on the gold and...does that mean you're in my family too? Hm...I'll have to ponder this. I haven't had the chance to look at your poem yet but, I will in about two secs...starting...now! lol.
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this is very sweet. not sure where it fits into the AP family request, but i do like it. it actually made me think of my relationship with my husband... tho i'm not sure the outcome with be the same, that certainly does ring true in my heart. thank you!
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Hehe...yeah, about that...
Why thank you. lol. Every one seems to think it's about a "dating" relationship, but it really isn't...At the time, I was thinking of my older brother. We call each other endearing names and things like that cause we didn't grow up together, which makes our relationship more special that any others. Sorry if that confused you. I meant to explain it but I guess I didn't.
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i had a feeling that might've been it... about brother sister relationship. still though, the bond created with family can also be created in a sense with a loved one such as a spouse. it is very good. thank you!
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You're welcome. And thanks for looking at it/commenting. With some other contests I have been in, the owner of the contest didn't even comment, so that makes you just so much cooler. Sorry. I'm kinda happy today...anyways, have a great day and TTYL!! ^_^
~Raine~
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Oh...this is so sweet and touching, my dear sister. You're an excellent writer.
^.^ Wonderful poem. Great flow.
~Solo
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Awww! Thank you so much, Brother!!
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