Cheers, my friend
Here's to Hate
Here's to Love
Here's to Fate
[Here's to Us]
Here's to the Tears
Here's to the Untasted
Here's to the Years
[that have been wasted]
Here's to the Lies
Here's to Playing Tug of War
with a heart that cries
[so you can settle a score]
Here's to You
Here's to Me
Saving myself
from your hypocrisy
[contradictions... confessions]
Here's to the Hatchet
Here's to the Knife
Here's to Succeeding
In taking your life
[Say your last goodbye]
Here's to Winning
Here's to the End
Here's to Surviving
[Cheers, my friend]
Author notes
Good Luck with your contest!
I would name him 'Alohilani(ah low hee LAH nee)*Noble brightness in Hawaiian* Ipo (ee POH)*beloved in hawaiian*
So the full name of your horse, would be 'Alohilani Ipo.
I hope you like it. Good luck with your contest, and I am so sorry for the loss of your horse, his mother. It's tragic to lose a horse, for any creature.
A contest entry
- Free verse or rhyme ... TOTAL 450 POINTS by Manoj Sanyal.
450 points, ended March 30, 2007, 14 entries
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Life is precious
This is a sad write abouy loss of life. I had some houses when I was young. Lost one because someone rode it to hard and it broke a leg. This is a great write! The Shaker
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Great write here
I often think of the same things for friends become family and without them what would we do . Cheers to friends and the understanding and love it takes to keep them near
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loved these lyrics... Here's to Winning
Here's to the End
Here's to Surviving i think I like these words best...great job thanks for sharng
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thank you so much for your sugestins, and yes it was verry hard to loose my horse, any way your poem was great, it seems alot like well great lyrics good luck and thanks for entering
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I liked the rhythm of the poem. Rhyming is also good.
Best wishes and good luck.
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Catchy, very catchy!!!
It reminded me of that Lizzie Borden lyric. "Lizzie Borden took an ax and gave her mother 40 whacks. When she saw what she had done, she gave her father 41." Your poem is rhythmic and catchy. It has a real, nice beat. "Here's to You, Here's to Me, Saving myself from your hypocrisy". That reads like a relationship gone to shit. I hope my analysis is right. You said before that your poems had little variations. This piece shows different. It is geared to more older crowd and includes dashes of satire within the lines. Great job!!
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