Holding water in one hand
One hand noiseless clapping
The clap of silent steps
Steps from somewhere to nowhere
Nowhere to go if I'm already here
Here and now, or there and late
A late thought in an empty mind
Never mind, there's no future
No future, that's happiness
Happy being in a smiling face
Facing death as a blank sheet
Sheeting down the tears of past
Past and future are only clouds
Can you cloud the endless joy?
In a list
A contest entry
- BLESSINGS AND LOVING THOUGHTS # 4 : ~ EA ~ by maa.
999 points, ended March 27, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a wonderful lesson
"No where to go if I'm already here"
There is a beautiful peace that comes from these words.
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Oh, I am afraid I cloud that joy too often, but keep trying to make those dark clouds part, sigh.
I agree with Margaret and ea about the circular thought, the wreath works so well with it and I wish you luck in the contest and much joy back to you!
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looking at the position of your hands at the photograph, and next to you acqua in the same position, made me laugh a lot ... you look like twins !
joke aside, I really enjoyed your poem very much and am proud of you for mastering this form, since I know how difficult it is for you to write in english and to use poetry-forms ... bravo, you did an excellent job ... your message is very inspiring, as always, a great offering to ea ...
thank you so much for your participation,
maa
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water
yes, you are right, the "i" often clouds the ever shining joy. but it does not matter for joy itself which remains the same. as your name evocates the fluidity of water, you should easily recognize the circular thought, as the water which continuously flows. we have at home a few fountains which remain us the importance of fluidity in our body, mind and life. so thank you for this homage to the beauty of water, the eternal mother!
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no, I would say -- not for very long anyway, dark little storm clouds that we are. LOL.
Yes, I agree with Margaret's observation. The form is fascinating in its rendering of circular thought -- much like a round in song.
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thank you, dear ea, for your appreciation of this circular flow. water, water, that we can never grasp. no grasping, what a joy! *smile*
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Smiles
The wreath is a wonderful form for such circular reasoning, I like the idea of
"Steps from somewhere to nowhere
Nowhere to go if I'm already here"
If you mean to equate no future with happiness, may I suggest a comma to pause?
There is joy in every line.
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thank you, dear margaret for your comment and support. i add the comma, you are right! joy, yes, every line, everywhere.
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update : you may play twice, if you wish, but can only win once
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holding joy sounds already very promising ...
you are all set now to start writing your poem ... please feel free to post it whenever you are ready ... I will leave this contest open for a few days ... so take your time if you wish ...
thank you for entering and i hope you will have fun ...
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thank you, dear maa, for your support and insistance for facilitating the flow of writing and expressing. you express yourself so freely that you are a real example for all of us!
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