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Hunger

HUNGER

BY  ROBERT  DAVIDSON


I  die  disappointed 
I  want  her  - this  mad  desire
I  cannot  still  this  hunger  in  my  heart

Oh  God,  -  it  makes  me  crazy  wanting  her
Lying  in  wait  for  her
Longing  for  her  every  moment  of  the  day  and  night

Once  we  put  our  mouths  together
Each  tasting,  touching  -  but  bruising  the  other
For  love  stings  more  than  it  consoles

Somehow  the  unattainable  puts  a  stronger  accent  on  desire
Men  often  fancy  what  is  withheld  -
So  mad  this  craving

Like  a  famished  wolf  on  prey
I  could  rip  every  stitch  off  that  girl  -
Yet  I  would  give  my  soul  to  graft  my  heart  on  hers,
Go  the  full  mile,  enter  and  consume  …

But  we  must  all  die  disappointed  of  something,  I  guess
Love’s  a  skeleton  from  which  we’ve  picked  the  flesh!

She’s  bit  me  to  the  bone.

Copyright  2006
www.robertdavidson.blogsource.com

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  • HollyxHavok
    March 19, 2008

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    Yes, I know what it's like!

    "Somehow the unattainable puts a stronger accent on desire"

    Those words could not be any more true, my dear... This was an over all wonderful write that I could relate to... Great job!!!

    +[♥]=HollyxHavok=[♥]+


  • notsotorturedartist
    December 8, 2007
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    its very emotional you love her and would do anything for her very good thank you


  • kao3
    December 8, 2007
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    I liked it, good work.


  • Twisteddolly
    October 12, 2007

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    I Love it, a new favorite of mine....i dont see it as an erotica, like the person below me said. more like a passionate desire piece. thank you soo much for entering.

    -Jessie


  • loveaswellashate
    August 18, 2007

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    This is a really good poem.. i like it.. sorry its taking so long.. lots of stuff goin on as the break is comeing to an end.. lol.. thanks for joining and good luck in the contest..
    Laters
    Loves...*hugs*


  • JadedxPassion
    July 4, 2007

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    I die disappointed
    I want her - this mad desire
    I cannot still this hunger in my heart

    Beautiful.Strong,passionate.

    Once we put our mouths together
    Each tasting, touching - but bruising the other
    For love stings more than it consoles

    Sharp, Emotion-filled words.

    Somehow the unattainable puts a stronger accent on desire

    Raw, truth filled words.

    The ending speaks the most to me. Great write, I like the different style.Thanks for entering.


  • Atrophya
    June 23, 2007

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    This is beautiful, truly it is. Wow, marvelous, and I've felt this way before for someone. It does drive you mad afterall.Lol. Great write, I love it.=]


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 17, 2007
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    Well done with this one!
    Great imagery and emotions throughout
    this piece. I think you did a great job
    and I thank you for your entry in my contest.
    I appreciate it and wish you the best
    of luck with it here! Keep up the
    great work here!




    Jeremy0826


  • On Frail Wings.
    June 14, 2007
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    wow. this is really emotional. thx for the entry good luck


  • AshesFromFire
    May 25, 2007
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    beautiful job! You definatly have skill!


  • ExpectingMommy18
    May 25, 2007

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    this was a very good write and i thought how it was written was very good

    good luck in the contest and thank you for entering


  • Painful Expressions
    May 24, 2007

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    Well Penned

    this is a well penned piece full of wonderful feelings and imagery thank you so much for your entry and best of luck in the contest...Michael


  • Cavca
    May 21, 2007
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    Interesting. It certainly expressed an emotion. Good luck.


  • Aquamarine.
    May 13, 2007
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    good luck in my contest i like yourr poem


  • dream5111
    May 13, 2007

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    "I die disappointed
    I want her - this mad desire
    I cannot still this hunger in my heart" is my favorite part good luck


  • Slowly Drifting
    May 8, 2007
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    very nice. i've read it before though. so i dunno.
    good luck.
    timpet.


  • AngelEyes13
    May 2, 2007

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    I liked this poem. I read it before in other contests. Thank you soo much for entering it in my contest.


  • shysky
    April 25, 2007
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    I liked this one before when you submitted it into a different contest of mine. It still suits and is extremely well written.

    Thank you for entering my contest. I loved the read.

  • AngelEyes13
    April 23, 2007
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    pLEASE ADD A PICTURE


  • CapturedMoon
    April 23, 2007
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    This is definetly a favorite.


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    April 20, 2007
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    Thankyou for your wonderful entry, Bella


  • shysky
    April 20, 2007
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    Wow this was incredible. To know that we all do die dissapointed and illusioned in life and love is a bitter pill to swallow, but swallow it we must. Fantastic Work, Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Angel With No Halo
    April 8, 2007
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    Great job writing this. I love the form and the emotion in this piece.

    Love hurts yes... and can be quite disappointing. Like the situation I am in.. what to do... what to do...irony in all it's glory... but to die without telling her.. without feeling her again.. would be such tragedy. Thank you for entering hon. Good luck

    ~Krys~

  • Bob Fox
    March 31, 2007

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    If

    If I could I may change one ot two thinga about women I have known. The others.. Hell not worth it. You have a lot ahead of ya. Fine write


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 27, 2007

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    Well done with this piece.
    It can be very frustrating to want someone
    so badly like this. Great work here and thanks
    for your entry in my contest. I wish you the
    best of luck with it!



    Jeremy0826


  • shysky
    March 27, 2007

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    Wow, this was rough and sensual, a teasing bit of taste of the desires of lust and pleasures of the flesh. This was a very dark side of the emotion of despair and desolation. I loved it! Thank you so much for sharing it.


  • aGent Lemon
    March 21, 2007

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    Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.


    You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got.


  • sca
    March 21, 2007
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    Very, very nice. Strong lines, killer ending. I can feel the desire.

    No real criticism from my end, other than I don't like the "..." ... but I know that's just me.

    Good luck in my contest,
    => Jess


  • kIrst1
    March 21, 2007
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    I like this poem - very passionate

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