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The Day Jesus Met Santa

The Day Jesus Met Santa


On the throne in Pearly Heights
seated to the right
Jesus helped to rule the Realms
through endless days and nights

Many angels were informed
by Him they earned their wings
and choirs of cherubs all performed
at His directorings

Back down on Earth in ages lost
to times long forward march
there came a day when Jesus called
all back to Peter's arch

Lining up were many whom
had records of great deeds
for helping numerous fellow men
in times of their dire needs

The gate beneath the arch was small
all entered one by one
the line was stretched out timelessly
into oblivion

St. Peter had his rules to which
all aspirants were test
Each deemed of worth was processed in
as an eternal guest

Somewhere along that endless line
in white and red array
a bearded jolly pudgy soul
lay snoring in a sleigh

Sometime in that infinity
a sleigh slugged to the gate
where Peter either "God forbids!"
or he congratulates

"Your name sir?" he inquired right off
"I'm Santa" was replied
and though the endless list was scanned
no Santa was identified

"There may be quite a problem here"
St. Peter said befuddled
"I'd better check with my Boss sir
these records may be muddled"

He dialed the hot line number
which patched him to the Throne
He told Jesus: "at the gate
is this ‘Santa’… who to us is unbeknown

And Lord here in our records
since no Santa does exist
should I allow a conference
or should he just be dismissed"

"How strange my dear gate keeper
what our records do not show
because the name of Santa
rings a bell with Us you know"

"Perhaps, dear Jesus, if You would
since this line may never end
come down here and help me judge
if this Santa should come in"

"Beloved Peter I will certainly
lend you My helping hand
I'm teaching holy angel school
And I'll come soon as I can"

A few light years passed
in a time that did not matter
for in forever it is different
from what was worldly pitter-patter

When Jesus walked down to St. Pete
from the Fortress up above
the aura they were standing in
glowed brilliant from His love

Startled by such brightness
Santa waking from a snooze
called out the name "RUDOLPH ???"
much to Jesus's amuse

"Santa" St. Pete beckoned
as Santa waddled forth
"Please meet the Savior, Jesus
Who will talk to you henceforth"

"Well Santa" said his Highness
"We have no records on you sir
and without such documentation
We normally issue a transfer"

Santa who was now confused
was at a loss for words
All he remembered was a 'POOPF!'
while he was tending reindeer herds

"Santa could you tell Me"
Jesus softly said
"Who you were and what you did
or it's 'you know where', I dread"

Santa's tummy grumbled
and he mumbled a "pshaw"
when at that moment passing
glanced an angel down in awe

The angel had a trumpet
and she raised it to her lip
The joyous blast that followed
even startled His Lordship                                                     

A radiance glistened Heaven
Tears of joy fell from the eyes
of a multitude of cherubs
who had filled God's lovely skies

Carefully Jesus studied Santa
whose smile was beaming bright
at the mirthful gleaming faces
of the angels taking flight

They sailed on their silver wings
down to that plump physique
and gave their amazed Santa
a kiss upon each rosy cheek

Santa turned around to Jesus
who was no longer there
and when he looked back toward the gate
what he saw froze fast his stare

Along the cherished highway
leading to the Fortress strong
were spread a zillion angels
singing "Here Comes Santa" songs

At the gate old Santa noticed
it's stern keeper teary eyed
who quickly beckoned Santa
and threw the gate open wide

Far more self-conspicuous
then he had ever been
Santa trudged up to the gate
stumbling bumbling in

He sauntered up the highway
past the cheering angel throngs
straight into the mighty kingdom
right up to the hallowed Thrones

Inside Santa saw Lord Jesus
Who was holding out His hand
then Jesus looked at God and said
"Let Me introduce this man

My Father this is Santa Claus
he came from earth as I
just why he wasn't on the list
I'll try to clarify

For Father he was never real
in flesh, though it matters not
for Heaven does not admit flesh
although many think it ought

To get to Heaven's hallowed gate
and join the privileged ranks
one's soul believes in good
and to evil says "No thanks!"

Dear Father he was wonderful
throughout his endless life
he gave full his self to others
as did his helpers and his wife

He was more than representative
of the Gift You gave to man
he was evidence of Your goodness
and his methods were so grand"

"Jesus", broke in His Father
"Let me ask a question here
so I can fully understand
and make this matter clear"

The Lord then queried, "Santa,
Why are you so adored?"
Santa said, "Is it because:
I love Your children Lord?"
                                                     
The Lord looked down at Santa
in understanding found anew
"There are no sleighs in Heaven
but I have a job for you

When My children come to visit
they seem stupored and in fear
they talk so hesitatingly
in this churchy atmosphere

For sugarplums and lollipops
in Heaven are not found
angels, harps, and trumpets
are the only things around

One's soul's the only suitcase
each is asked to bring above
for in Paradise the beauty
is import of peace and love

So please be seated Santa
on my left next to me
all my children now will sparkle
for I will place them on your knee"

Then Santa laughed and Jesus smiled
Their Father grinned and boast
"Here now we three complete my Throne
Father, Son, and Holy gh…ah... Host"

                    ***

Furthermore throughout all time
unending, far, and wide
the fear of God is gone from child
Since Santa's on his side.





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  • Denerica
    November 18
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    This is adorable...like a parable to how Jesus knows who we are, what our hearts are about, this is brilliant to even accept santa in heaven. Excellent. Blessings.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    November 18
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    Congratulations on all the trophies
    Well done, poet
    Thank you so much for sharing this and for being part of the contest
    The very best of luck to you!


  • islekine gold member
    November 18
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    Thanks for sharing this...

    One of the most creative writes I've read in a long time!
    sorry about the prewrite thing!


  • myrataal silver member
    November 9
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    Thank you for entering a delightful poem ...

    in this contest for Naka. I am sure many Santa's will be welcomed in Heaven.




  • Graciee
    October 27

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    I think you are a great poet! You have a great uplifting story which even children will love, you made me want to carry on reading this wonderful story. I think there is a moral in there somewhere..

    "For sugarplums and lollipops
    in Heaven are not found
    angels, harps, and trumpets
    are the only things around"
    I love this stanza the most. Its a fantastic piece and you should be SO proud!

    Thank you ever so much for your entry, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!!

    Thanks, Graciee.

    P.S. One for the finalists!!!


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 25

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    Oh this was wonderful. I have a very short attention span and this was quite long but I couldn't stop reading it. I'd like to read it to my daughter, I think, if you don't mind. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck in it!!


  • Dryad Enya
    October 16

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    Blimey. You won a trophy on nearly every contest this has been in! You are lucky arn't you. I can see why, there is very little for me to say, other than Fantastic! Brillaint and nutty. You've done it again. Well done you!
    Best of luck in my contest, hope you can keep it up
    Dryad Enya


  • WaterChild Reborn silver member
    October 15

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    I read this before and enjoyed it, so thank you for entering.

    Unfortunately the other judge, being all of 30 months old, has the attention span of a 2-year-old and was not able to sit through the entire poem. His limit is about 20 lines.

  • hend shaheen
    October 4
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    really well written ...the way the story flows....thanxx for taking time to enter .....good luck

  • poets whisper silver member
    September 12

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    congrats on all the previous trophies. I've read this many times before and it still makes me smile. It is very imaginative and of course the rhyme is great and the ending is very hopeful. Thank you for entering the contest.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 2
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    This was funny! Thanks for entering and good luck!!~


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    August 31
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    Well done and cogratulations on the silver....great poem...Lulu


  • A m b r e a
    August 31

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    This is an amazing write!! The creativity and flow are amazing! and the imagery!...WOW! Very well done! I must say, this would make an amazing childrens book (for christians) that is. haha! Thank you sooo much for sharing this stunning piece with me! Good luck in the contest!


  • Bluemonday silver member
    August 30
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    wow how long did it take to write that..Amazing...


  • Tinselpool
    August 24

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    Furthermore throughout all time
    unending, far, and wide
    the fear of God is gone from child
    Since Santa's on his side.

    Very inspiring, this poem. Acknowledge that you did not include your prompt or name in the AN. One pw per three fresh writes. Please enter three fresh writes in the contest before it ends or I will have to dq you.

    love it,
    clair


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    August 24
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    Great write with good rhythm and rhyme
    I am unfortunately not a fan of santa lol
    Thanks for entering and best of luck to you


  • Shadow Anonymised gold member
    August 21

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    thanks the amazing entry. i really like the meter and rhyme youve used, but i'm not so keen on the length, it just seems a bit too long. i did smile at the title though.

    thanks again and good luck.


  • WordsAndWits
    August 21

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    Very nice job on this! Sometime though, please go back and add punctuation to the places where it is needed. It may be a lot of work, but it makes a better poem. I also noticed several grammar mistakes you should fix. Anyway, these are minor mistakes and you wrote a very nice saga here. Great job and good luck. Congrats on all the other wins,
    - Caroline


  • InsanityisAmusing
    August 20

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    I don't have much of a long attention span but this kept my interest to the end. Lovely job. Thank you very much for entering.


  • PatheticKt
    August 16
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    The title sparks utmost intrigue- bookmarked.
    Will try to find the time to read this thoroughly


  • kylierenea
    August 16

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    This is a very long poem! But you managed to keep it interesting all the way through. Good rhyming to, very easy to read. Great poem, keep up the good work. Thanks for entering my contest


  • epitome
    August 13
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    Good Luck!

    amazing that you held my interest for the whole poem!

    lovely poem.

    Good luck.


  • schoolsable
    August 12
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    i LOVED it.. a very great write!
    Good luck in my contest!

    ~Sam

  • zouzou1990
    August 11
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    awesome

    i wish that someday i will be able to write something as big and beautiful as that
    could i please ask you to rate my poem called love birds and what you think of my rhymes?
    it would really mean a lot to me


  • LullabyOfADeadMan
    August 7

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    Brilliant writing! Definately. I wish that I'd write something like this! Lol. With that said, I have to remove it from the contest because...it wasn't what I was looking for. I'm sorry. It was definately a great peice though!

    ~~Tay.


  • melodytcromer
    July 31

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    I really love this poem I have read it so far 5 times from the day I forst read it. It is going to be my all time favorite I think in the end! Thank You for sharing it with me. Melod


  • ILuvsMeKitties
    July 27
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    thanks for the entry


  • melodytcromer
    July 26
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    I love this


  • Antebellum
    July 19
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    Beautiful.
    love the rhymeing
    thanks for entering,
    good luck.

  • Aries gold member
    July 13
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    Wonderful

    A lovely story/poem beautifully penned enchanting for all who read


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    July 12
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    great poem

    Add to finalist this is my top choice

    Good luck


  • Heva Feva
    July 3

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    "Back down on Earth in ages lost
    to times long forward march
    there came a day when Jesus called
    all back to Peter's arch"

    These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
    -heva ♫


  • EmbraceTheJourney
    June 30

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    Good Luck!

    Well. That was unexpected. This is a GREAT piece! The rhyming is brilliant, and the story is cute as could be. A little on the too long side, but there's not a wasted word in there. Thanks for entering!

    ~Tabitha


  • nobodys-girl
    June 28

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    Oh this is so good! I think having santa next to God would definitly help my fears for sure! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • Persona Dificil
    June 28
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    lovely....

    I thought this was rather brilliant. Good on ya, mate.


  • explain.everything
    June 28

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    this is creative and humourous. i loved it. congrats on all those trophies, how about you let some others have a chance, your dominating all the contests with this wonderful peice!!! hehe. good job...nice rhyme too, its really flowed well...


  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 27

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    hahaha, you don't say, well actually you did say hahaaha thanks for your lighthearted banter, thanks for your permission as well lots of love


  • Maggie Kay
    June 26
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    brilliant work but is way over my limit sorry.


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 26
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    The Day Jesus met Santa my vot

  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 26

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    very good poem

    Showed originaility humor and talent as a proffesional writer I loved very much I love the whole poem every paragragh and line the whole poem spoke for itself I like the way she added a story about Santa not just for being Santa but forbeing a kind and generous person that God loves to even though make believe I loved I'm speechless.
    Blessing
    Good luck!
    Sharon


  • isaacokumu gold member
    June 24
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    good write, good luck in the contest


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 22
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    Excellent!

    From beganning to end awesome poem I am speechless.
    God Bless & Good luck
    Sharon


  • Gods only child
    June 18
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    beautifully written


  • Lively Matter
    June 10

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    Immediatly after I saw that you had 230+ comments I knew it would be a good read. But I could never imagine how good it actually was! And such a long list of trophies too... but more than that... it was so long, yet so put together... you did with a couple pages of art then what i could do in a couple lines... Such a wonderful and kinda cute story... Man... This wasn't just a good read for me but my whole family too lol... YOU ROCK!


  • AndNowWhat
    June 9
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    This is a really sweet poem, and I did enjoy it, but it simply has won too much stuff. I'm sorry that I didn't make this clearer (and I will fix that in a moment), but I'd really enjoy some undiscovered work. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter, but I'm going to take this one out. Best of luck, and if you want to enter another poem, you are free to.
    -AndNowWhat


  • Shadow Stalker
    June 8

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    Wow

    Your poem was amazingly long, but funny, cute, sweet, and cheery. I really enjoyed reading it and loved the flow. You did a fantastic job. Congratulations on your win.

    ~Night mistress 1~


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    June 6

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    A right fine story told here. The roots of Santa Clause are far older than St. Nicholas, they date back into the mists from which Oden(Wotan), Frigg and their ilk sprang forth. Much of the Santa Clause tradition pre-dates Christianities entry into the area. The cosmology is quite interesting. This is well done, I like the sentiment, adoption is the sincerest form of tolerance. Bravo on not being preachy.
    Peace


  • Walk-Free
    June 5
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    i really did enjoy reading this amusing piece

    but my attention drifted halfway.

    maybe a lot of people complain about the length of this poem, but i applaud you for the hard work you put into this poem.

    you have thoroughly deserved those trophies!

    blessings~


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    May 31

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    I really did like this piece.  Usually I get frustrated in reading long poem and many times stop in the middle, but not with this one. The eagerness to know what is going to happen next keep me going on and on. Thank you for sharing this piece with us!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • mjm1495
    May 30
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    Good job on the poem a little long but its fine. Good luck!


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 25

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    I was torn between laughter and tears the whole way through... what an amazing write, my friend; I can certainly see why it has the array of trophies that it does!
    Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!

    Maria


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    May 22
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    definately different it is spiritual and yet commical to me thanks for entering


  • Mariana gold member
    May 20

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    I have read this before. I still love it

    Mariana  


  • hyper thing
    May 15
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    excellent


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 5

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    Excellent and congratulations on all them trophys. Such a long poem I like all the sweet treats. Thank you for sharing.


  • londiscarpenter
    May 3
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    APPLAUSE

    i ADORE THIS POEM. Thanks for posting and good luck in the contest.


  • Animals
    April 29

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    Long... But Good

    This is very long... It is however very well written and I love it. A bit different than my other entries I was actually looking for childhood memories but o well. Thank you for your entry!
    Good Luck!
    -Animals


  • TheSexyOne
    April 26

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    WOW

    All i can say is WOW my goodness for so many reasons ONE because IT WAS AMAZING and such a creative idea i enjoyed it so much TWO becuase i dont know if u realized but you have won ALOT with this poem cause its so amazing !!!!!!and ALL THE COMMENTS its insaine how amazing this piece is!!!! wow thanks you for entering

  • thenorthernstar
    April 24

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    nice story I found it very interesting it was a fasinating little tale I really liked it thanks so much for entering


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 21

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    I try and live the Christmas spirit all year round. You penned a masterpiece for AP! This is the best write around. Thanks for a splendid work!


  • Lime Ocarina
    April 20

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    Very long, very satisfying.
    I hope you keep writing more and more things like this in the future!
    Thanks for the entry!


  • black hearted rebel
    April 20

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    WOW

    This was really long but I enjoyed it alot!I hate really long poems but this one had my attention throughout!Thanks for entering


  • Dark Otter
    April 18
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    Hi!

    I still love it! A phenomenal piece of work that has already won a gold in a contest of mine. Its humor and emotionality still touch me.

  • Denerica
    April 9

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    Wow

    A Brilliant story told...I just loved how Santa is accepted in the Kingdom and for all the children that must go to heaven, awesome, just so touching, you're right I loved it. Blessings.

  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    April 7
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    I remember this and I loved it! Still do
    Thank you for once again sharing this with me and for being part of the contest..the very best to you!


  • Aajdj
    April 3
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    omg i liked it more the 3rd time i read it


  • Simp
    April 3

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    I commented this and it didn't post, ugh.
    Well I simply said I enjoyed reading this, it was fun. I like reading out loud and I did and I couldn't help but smile while doing so. I enjoyed the words you used. When you first introduced Santa I giggled because I didn't know what to expect reading this so it was just a bit of a surprise to find him in here and I knew immediately who you were referring to. 'somewhere along that endless line
    in white and red array
    a bearded jolly pudgy soul
    lay snoring in a sleigh

    Sometime in that infinity
    a sleigh slugged to the gate
    where Peter either "God forbids!"
    or he congratulates.'

    I enjoyed reading that line. huge smile came across my face and then near the end. '"Here now we three complete my Throne
    The Father, Son, and Holy gh… Host"'

    Enjoyed that wording of that. Great job.

  • InsanityisAmusing
    April 3
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    This is such a sweet story, you've written this amazingly, and you must keep up the good work! You have a great talent! Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • im not broken
    April 1

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    IT'S SO SWEET! I LOVE IT!

    Oh I love this! It is such a sweet story. I must say when I first started reading I was worried that you would not mention that good deeds do not get you into heaven (If infact you believe along those lines) but I was glad that in stanza 39 (if my counting is correct!) Santa said "It is because I love your children lord" That was a beautiful line just in its simplicity and its clarification. FANTASTIC WRITE!

    Sincerely,
    Toddy


  • Desdmona
    April 1
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    Oh my goodness! When I first saw it was 200-something lines, I was ready to give up but it was 200-something lines of brilliance and fun. I thought this was fantasic. It's true, some parts are unneeded to tell the story but it's a riot to read and very cleverly thought out. Good job and good luck! ~Des


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 29

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    • if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason.


  • Loveberry
    March 27

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    hahahahahhahahahah!!!
    I was laughing and crying and smiling and completely blown away by this piece! such a concept! such an ideal! the moral concept is absolutely gorgeous, and the humor throughout only added to the beauty of this poem. i am honestly at a loss for words because... it was simply amazing. i am curious, however, as to the mood that you were in when you wrote this masterpiece? very random, and most likely contemplative lol. i loved it in it's completeness! only negatives were a couple small forced rhymes, but they added to its quaintness so truly no issues
    love, love, LOVED IT!

  • x0sugaprincess25
    March 27

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    Wow this is a beautiful poem! It is definitely deserving of all those trophies. Thank you for sharing this poem on allpoetry. It made my eyes water a few times. Congratulations!! ^_^


  • Shantti
    March 25
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    This is superbly awesome. Thank you so much for entering

  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 22

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    This is a cute, fine tale and let me say congratulations on all the trophies! Very deserving!
    I think this is wonderful
    Thank you for sharing and for being part of this contest!


  • queenie
    March 21
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    well we can certainly see that you didn't miss a contest, so this is not the contest for you, but since i will be opening a contests for honorable mentions, i hope you enter it there.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 20
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    definitely a finalist


  • Puppydog gold member
    March 14

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    SO CUTE!!!

    You have joyously captured the very essence of what Santa is, love to all children of the world.


  • AllThatRemains
    March 12
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    Wow. -rofls- That's brilliant.


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 9

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    my goodness this is a long poem. though i didnt feel like i was wading which is a good thing. well done on this poem. i can imagine quite a lot of work went into it. congrats. and thanks for entering Emmy


  • daviscth silver member
    March 9
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    This will forever be one of my favorite poems. I love the beautiful feeling I always get from reading it. Thank you for the entry.


  • Pureisolation
    March 9
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    wonderful poem i really liked the read.


  • David J Martin gold member
    March 2

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    First of all, congratulations on all of your trophies thus far; this is a very deserving poem. I really liked your structure, and admired your rhyme. Some very wise words within this too - had me contemplating life and religion. You obviously spent a lot of time on this and did well to keep your reader's interest, despite of it's length. A superbly crafted piece that invokes a range of emotions, most importantly, happiness.

    Thank you for your entry.

    David.


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 21

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    Thank you for entering this! It's a very unique and original write, and the rhyme is well done. The last stanza was very well crafted.
    -Lena


  • Samantha Marie
    February 20
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    How very long...and strange lol.
    Great write, Thanks for entering this contest and Good luck


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    February 13

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    The Day Jesus Met Santa


    hummz, brilliant work and so many trophies
    but here contest is tough
    Likeness, Age comparison, words,Beauty, Ideas, Thoughts,Title, level of poetry
    these all contains 100 marks, and i will mark out of hundred to let you win
    and you scored 63

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Rheea gold member
    February 12

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    I loved this the first time I read it and even more the second. You have the talent for drawing people in. Thank you Bill.


  • Captain Obvious
    February 8
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    very funny. :]
    good luck!

  • karatekid
    February 1
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    this is very good i think that if a kid read this they would get a very good kick out of it


  • Mariana gold member
    January 30
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    This is beautiful Bill. Truly a heavenly write. Bravo!

    Mariana

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    January 30

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    first, congratulations on all the trophies you have won with this marvelous write. secondly, usually, when there is a write this long on here i lose interest after about three stanzas. however, your wonderful rhyme and meter held me captive each and every word. that alone earns the maximum applause i can give. thirdly, i read your write to see what was in the finals list for this huge contest. after doing so i humbly bow my head and give respect to one of the best poems i have read in my entire life. thank you for sharing such awe inspiring work with me today. viyanna rosemarie


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    January 30
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    tHIS IS WONDERFUL AND AN OLD FAVOURITE OF MINE WHICH I HAVE POPPED BACK TO READ MANY TIMES I LOVE IT
    THANKS


  • Filia-Dei
    January 28

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    A lovely story indeed, my contest though was about something that makes you happy, so although that doesn't really fit it, I won't remove you from the contest.
    As its also a prewrite, again doesn't fit what I asked for. So you probably won't win, but thank you for your poem.

    I really like your structure, and use of rhyme, its a sweet tale, you've done a marvellous job on this poem and you should be very proud. Thank you for sharing, and Good luck in your contests.

    God bless.


  • Ms.Daydream
    January 28
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    OMG! Absolutely amazing. It took you 10 years? Well, it got to a great ending, you really deserve all these trophies. I warm up to this poem also because I am, as they say, 'one of the Lord's children' (I'm nearly 14), and I still like believing in Santa. I think this is one of my favourites! Great rhyming too! =D


  • steal-my-scene
    January 26
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    How beautiful and jolly. Thank you for sharing and good luck.


  • libel -
    January 25

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    :D

    All I can do is smile at the amusing but slightly uncomfortable positions they find themselves in.

    Kudos to this particular part -

    A few light years passed
    in a time that did not matter
    for in forever it is different
    from what was worldly pitter-patter


  • CelticQueen
    January 21

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    Well, the theology is a bit screwy and the writing is sometimes off, but the story's great! Thanks for entering my contest.

    celtic queen


  • Mantha
    January 19
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    WOW!


  • abuyi
    January 18

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    woow.. you had everything that I asked for.. your rhyming is beautiful. I am not a Christian but that dint stop me form enjoying your read. I like how you dealt with concept of Santa clause not being real in flesh and also of the holy ghost completing the trinity. its a very loving poem and must read by all.
    so far this is one of the best entry I got but as I see you have already won many deserving trophies.. I might be lil bias for others a chance. for you sure know this is a very good write and i wish that other entries I got were of this standard.
    thanks for entering my contest and best of luck

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