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She fills the air
with her empty words;
the mindless monologue
weaves a net of nonsense,
sticky as a spiderweb,
but weak as wet noodles.
Too trapped to listen,
I hear
childish pleas for attention,
without the patient pause
for interaction.
The only reaction
I can muster
is a nonchalant shrug,
and a silent wish
for temporary deafness.
Author notes
This is about my MOTHER (NOT kids!!!), and her inability to endure silence, or even enjoy music, or listen to someone else without 'thinking' aloud.
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1050 points, ended March 21, 2007, 11 entries
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Very aproppriate and well written. I've known people who hld three way conversations with themselves..
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So you get it huh? LOL
I've had conversations with myself but sotto voce and only 2 way not three.
I'm only partially crazy. I'm such an underachiever!
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aww
what a beautiful piece. a web of nonsense seemed to be baby babble. baby babble seemed to be in early stages of talk before one understands them. childish pleas for attention seemed bittersweet, because the speaker wishes for a little silence. this write evenly balances out the good and the bad of parenting a young child. -
How I like this one
Reminds me of my own time parenting which I loved but also had those moments.
Terry
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well, i and your mother have something in common. i talk to the radio so i can empathize with her plight quite well. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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Hmm...this is an interesting take on wanting someone to remain quiet for a while. This really isn't my favorite style so I'm trying not to be too critical, overall I'd say it was goodness, the rhythm is off...but, good write nonetheless.
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It makes me wonder, in my psychologist's reptilian brain, what the cause of this idiosyncrasy might be
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very interesting
this was a very interesting read...and I can also relate...my mom babbles... :-)
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Interesting!
not sure if your mom is deaf or has an illness ... none the less this really caught my attention and I thought it was really a good write!
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Last couple of lines.. maybe .. for a temporary deafness or the power to mute. lol..( just a suggestion) well, I have to say I enjoyed this piece. Interesting. good ohrasing. Well done. Blessings. Debby
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Yeah, the last line is one of those that isnt totally necessary.
This reminds me of a doctors waiting room. It didnt really speak to me, but maybe the tone and the subject go together to create that effect... you decide if you want to raise the stakes and make it more emotionally impacting.
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