Clutched tightly
in anguished hands.
Overflowing with
yesterdays, todays
and tomorrows…
The instrument of
sorrow and joy
bleeds out its excess.
Ribbons of silken thread
weave their way
into
thirsting parchment,
Until
a souls tale
is permanently woven
into the intricate
tapestry of life,
and the bittersweet taste
of immortality,
teases moistened lips.
Author notes
Another attempt...I was inspired to write this when I was asked what compels me to write...I was left with the feeling that it is not I who is in control of the pen, nor the words, but they who are in control of me. When I dug a bit deeper, I realized that there is a certain amount of vanity involved in it as well. It is our little attempt at attaining immortality.
Please tell me what you think
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a self examining write. the pen examines and writes about ifself. that in itself is an interesting topic.
i think i've written similar myself. sitting banging my head for a lack of inspiration... but this poem sounds inspired. your language is fluid.
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VERY GOOD
AN INTERESTING READ THANK YOU
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this poem is good i like the way you chose yor words! i also like the systematically way you put these words into order expecially in these lines
"Until
a souls tale
is permanently woven
into the intricate
tapestry of life,
and the bittersweet taste
of immortality,
teases moistened lips."
you have the talent that is needed to survive in the poetic world.
-hali
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Wow, I really enjoyed the message you are conveying here.
Overflowing with
yesterdays, todays
and tomorrows… Were my favorite lines.
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I got points from rating your poem, here's your Bunnies
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Do we try for immortality of sorts, or is it in hopes of somehow having a shaping affect on the future whence we pass? I have to say though, the last three lines of this well crafted piece are the some of the strongest I have read. Thank you for sharing.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/919345
A poem I wrote on a similar level if you care to read.
Also I'd applaud this but I am out of bunnies for one day, and last points have been spent. -
Wow! This is such a great piece. I really love this and enjoyed it very much. i like the imnagergy it gives.
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Dude
Very nice!! Imagery is at peak here... and an insteresting prompt you have to have written this poem. "It is our little attempt at attaining immortality" -- and mostly our only! You seem like a very intellectual young lady, and very wise. Awesomeness!
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Nice.
I like the imagery, the flow, everything. On a related topic, you may want to check out my poem for poets.
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A very fine write about the creative process. I agree the Muses are in more control of what we write than we are. For a completely different look at the creative process, you might like to read my poem: Sappho.
Here's the link for it, if you care to read it:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2137889
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