The blood runs fierce through the oceans of hate,
the slaughtering of innocents drowning the world in floods.
Floods of raging red,
floods of thoughtless blood shed.
Evil murderous acts haunting the worlds harmony.
Lies and betrayal flow through the tide,
float through the air, into nothingness,
stolen dreams bursting through the darkness.
Haunting visions blinding you from love,
guilt stains your soul with blood on your hands.
As tears teem down from the sky,
and you are asking why?
Whilst we are asking how?
So much hate staining red spreading over the world,
from the heartless torture.
Swim in your sea of red,
with the creatures your hate has deemed dead.
Live in this ocean of destruction greed created,
you spread evil, drowning the world in blood.
You stain peace with your hateful flood.
Behind lies you hide,
remains of peace you discard in the tide.
Haunting the world with streams of hatred,
destroying hope and innocence,
taking the freedom away from nature.
The world you have raped and tortured.
Author notes
contest option.. 4.Hate
Contest Option #6
A contest entry
- IMAGE INSPIRED CONTEST # 2 by Alilly.
425 points, ended March 23, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My First Contest by fallenangel671.
800 points, ended May 6, 2007, 94 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 649 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Raven Qualifier - Dark: Anger, Angst and Goth by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 124 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow I can see why you won Gold
This is a masterpiece write truly amazing. I really liked it and had to read it twice it intriged me so much. (LISA)
"Swim in your sea of red,
with the creatures your hate has deemed dead.
Live in this ocean of destruction greed created,
you spread evil, drowning the world in blood.
You stain peace with your hateful flood."
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WONDERFUL
You can feel the pain, I was looking for insiration to my poetry and I do Believe I have found it! thank you for being such a wonderful poet! -
This penetrates into the human soul. I felt the pain of this piece!
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This is one of those writes, that one must stop, scroll back up and reread, because I thought I may have missed something. It captivates my attention, from beginning to end, and makes me reluctant to leave this page! (A rarity) Fantastic job! A well deserved trophy winner!
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destroying hope and innocence,
taking the freedom away from nature.
The world you have raped and tortured.
This is truely a deep and very sensitive write revealing the depth and intensity of the heart and feel of the muse here..The Gold trophy is here with the result of a fire which I can see in the words here... you are very affirm to describe and to grasp the truth of life with so much open eyes of yours..Your minute details showed your strength here..Indeed an effective work is here..
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This is a nice poem...so dark and...bloody. It hits somewhere.
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Speechless
My Dear Poet...
I have no idea what to say after this wonderful piece of poetry...I love reading metaphors because it is such a great way not only to make people think but for them to get to know the writer...
The poem was really filled with hate and anger and is was pretty dark for me...but it does not remove the fact that I loved it
Thank you so much for sharing this with us
Much Love
Tessa -
You have used intelligent metaphors to refer to some of the commonplace things, which impresses upon the reader, the severity of the issue you are addressing. The angst and the pain seem to have found way from your heart.. or your head (in case you are a head thinker).... right through your pen.. onto the paper. The poem on the whole is quite intense.
Thanks for entering the Raven Qualifier and Good Luck! -
woah you can just feel the anger within this poem and thats why I liked it so much. you really did a great job at displaying the emotion of hate in this piece.
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this was an excellent poem and i loved how you described hate, it was amazing how you described i espically loved the part
You stain peace with your hateful flood.
Behind lies you hide,
remains of peace you discard in the tide.
Haunting the world with streams of hatred,
destroying hope and innocence,
taking the freedom away from nature.
The world you have raped and tortured.
it was an awesome way to end the poem and i loved it, good luck in the contest
keep writing
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A very descriptive piece you have here, I like the image of the sea of red and the imagery is great and the beat somewhat fast, I enjoyed. I’ve always wondered just how different this world would be if the animals had taken the lead instead of us. Nice work, thank you very much for the entry and best wishes in the contestAlilly
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Haunting the world with streams of hatred,
destroying hope and innocence,
taking the freedom away from nature.
The world you have raped and tortured
very good
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ouch! this was very angry. one of the positive aspects of this obvious vent is that you seem able to get it out.
So much hate staining red spreading over the world,
from the heartless torture.
Swim in your sea of red,
with the creatures your hate has deemed dead.
Live in this ocean of destruction greed created,
you spread evil, drowning the world in blood.
I liked this part a lot. I hope this relieves these feelings for you...
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My first impression was of anger, hatred, and disillusionment.
This is but one side of reality.
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